He held her hand and slipped something cold and metal into it. “If anything bad happens you know what to do.” Jacob promptly got up and sprinted away. Bel held the gun and turned it over in her hands. She ran her fingers along the barrel. It felt smooth. Somehow, the gun felt, friendly. She heard a clang and looked as 20 or 30 metal cone-type things fell to the floor. Bel laid the gun down on the floor and picked up one of the bullets. She tossed it in the air and caught it again. She picked up the gun and fumbled around until the magazine fell out of the handle. Her hands were shivering. She slid the bullets into the mag and pushed it into the handle till it clicked.
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I've been writing this at school on the computers in word and I wanted to share this with you lot here. I fell in love with this extract and just HAD to post it. If anyone wants the full story (so far) e-mail
iadsgb@googlemail.com and say who you are here. I'll send as much is as written and will also send it when it's finished.
Not to brag but I think this is very well done. I would not reccomed reading it if you are not a strong reader, or are under the age of five, as some bits have gory areas and language and a wide range of vocab.
-Iad
P.S My English teacher said i'm approaching my target for the end of year 9 and i'm in year 7.
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