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Broken Bricks-Type 01: Tactical Bomber
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Type 01: Tactical Bomber:
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/322959
Any advice/criticism welcome!
Prior thanks to anyone who criticizes!
My CC: http://www.mocpages.com/group_conversation.php?id=20385&topicid=80247
http://www.mocpages.com/group_conversation.php?id=20385&topicid=82283

It's pretty good. I like the engines and the thrusters. The tail is good too.

But I think the canopy is too big and the wings need to be a triangular shape rather than rectangular.
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| June 16, 2012, 7:43 am
Quoting Broken Bricks
Type 01: Tactical Bomber:
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/322959
Any advice/criticism welcome!
Prior thanks to anyone who criticizes!
My CC: http://www.mocpages.com/group_conversation.php?id=20385&topicid=80247
http://www.mocpages.com/group_conversation.php?id=20385&topicid=82283

It's a nice looking plane!

The colors look great, I like how the grey is mixed with white and hints of yellow.
The tail wings look great.

My main piece of advice: Only use SNOT when you need it! SNOT is great for giving small details and making smooth surfaces, but it mustn't be used everywhere.
Due to the SNOT, the front wings seem too thick. If they were tiled, they would be slightly thinner.
Overall nice job.


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| July 19, 2012, 12:44 pm
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Quoting Halhi 141
My main piece of advice: Only use SNOT when you need it! SNOT is great for giving small details and making smooth surfaces, but it mustn't be used everywhere.
Due to the SNOT, the front wings seem too thick. If they were tiled, they would be slightly thinner.
Overall nice job.


Excellent piece of advice, Halhi! Keep it up.
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| July 25, 2012, 9:39 am
Quoting Broken Bricks
Type 01: Tactical Bomber:
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/322959
Any advice/criticism welcome!

Nicely done, this looks like a really neat bomber. However, as with everything, there are things to be improved. ;)

The first thing I'd change is all the studs showing. If you have enough pieces, I'd recommend tiling them so they're smoother looking.
Then I see the cockpit and surrounding area. It looks excellent; big and dangerous. However, past the cockpit it flattens out and the contrast between thick and thin looks odd. If you kept the middle as thick as the front I think that it'd look better. Also, the wings seem a bit too square. Perhaps if you reduced the width slightly as they get longer it would seem sleeker. Finally, I think that SNOT would be a better choice for the back fins. That way the undersides of the plates wouldn't show.
Still, a very cool plane there!
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| July 25, 2012, 9:57 am
Quoting Broken Bricks
Type 01: Tactical Bomber:
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/322959
Any advice/criticism welcome!
Prior thanks to anyone who criticizes!
My CC: http://www.mocpages.com/group_conversation.php?id=20385&topicid=80247
http://www.mocpages.com/group_conversation.php?id=20385&topicid=82283

I do not know much about airplanes, but I know how they manage to fly and I know that military airplanes are supposed to either look sleek or oldschool cool. This is neither, but it comes close to the prior and I assume you meant to make it as such.

The cockpit has a nice angle technique to make the windscreen blend in a bit more, but the sole choice of the piece was poor, becasue you decided to utilize a hard-to-use cockpit piece, although you may not have others.

The middle section is too flat and abruptly starts two studs behind the cockpit, like two different MOCs merged into one. Like a MOC griffin with the front half of eagle and back side of lion, except it is front of good creation and back of a plate with three tails at the back.

The wings are very short and blocky, I would much more prefer seeing some slopes on them and working the engine into the wings would look much better too. Especially brick-built engines.

The two simetrical back fins seem to begin too steeply and are very simple, though not looking so bad. The middle one seems unnecessary.

What I do like is the opening features.

Anyways, try making a smaller, more fluently shaped aircraft next time if you do not have enough bricks for a larger one.
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| July 27, 2012, 6:03 am
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