After being asked to check out so many MOC comics, I've finally decided to make my own. This is my first comic, I'm still learning so please don't be too harsh.
About this creation
Annor Terrano: Jedi Padawan of Master Kerrick Sato
Kerrick Sato: Jedi Master
Var Damar: Republic Captain and friend of Master Sato
Ike Locke: Republic Pilot currently piloting Var's ship
Davin Bastra: Sith Assassin
Major Vhet: Clone Major
Captain Aaray: Clone Captain
Major Karda: Clone Seargent
Commander Jifo: Clone Commander
Kerrick Sato: Fall Back! We need to make it to the ship, we can't afford to be slowed by these droids!
Commander Jifo: Sir, I think their gaining, are you sure the ship is this way?
Kerric Sato: You forget, I have the force to guide me, the ship is this way.
Kerrick Sato: We're almost out of the forest, the clearing is just ahead!
Annor Terrano: Look, there's the compound!
Var Damar: Ah good, the ships still in one piece, just the way we left it.
Major Vhet: Except for the small fact that the local security has been alerted of our presence.
Commander Jifo: I advise that we split up, Annor should sneak along the outer wall with Var and Ike. Master Sato, I advise that the rest of us attempt to delay the droids until Captain Ike can get the ship up and running again.
Kerrick Sato: Annor, take Major Vhet with you.
Annor Terrano: Then it is settled, begin the attack, the clankers await!
(The heroes make their way toward the compound)
(Upon arrival they are met by blaster fire)
Captain Aaray: I guess they aren't looking to take prisoners!
Kerrick Sato: I'll take out the AAT! You three need to focus on repelling the droids!
(Master Sato force pushes the droids out of his way in order to charge the AAT)
Aanor Terrano: Move quickly, we don't have much time.
(A loud mechanical sound is heard from the other side of the wall)
Ike Locke: What's that?
Major Vhett: That's trouble...
(Annor ignites his lightsaber as he whirls around the corner and comes face to face with a pair of SBDs)
(With a smooth gesture of his hand, Annor forces the SBDs to the ground while Major Vhet blasts them to smithereens)
(Master Tano lets out a battle cry as he stabs the cockpit of the AAT)
(With the SBDs out of commission, the heroes run up the boarding ramp)
Ike Locke: Quickly, we haven't much time!
Captain Ike Locke: Our weapons are offline, but I should be able to get us airborne in a few moments. Have you secured the Separatists' battle plans?
Annor Terrano: I'm working on, I'll be done in just a sec....
(Master Tano and the clones find themselves quickly overwhelmed as more and more droids appear from all directions)
Master Tano: This is it men, it's time to make a final stand!
(Captain Aaray screams out in pain as he his pummeled with blaster fire)
Captain Aaray: AAAAH!
Commander Jifo: There's just too many of them sir, we can't hold out much longer!
Master Tano: We won't need to Jifo, the others are already on the ship with the battle plans, our mission is complete, all we have left to do is ensure that they have a chance to make it back to Republic soil.
Commander Jifo: It looks like it's just you and me sir, do you have a plan?
(The droids suddenly lower their weapons and become unresponsive)
Master Tano: Well, no, but we may not even need one anymore!
Commander Jifo: Do you suppose they were deactivated?
Master Tano: There is no one around to destroy the command ship, no, I suspect that the owner of this facility DOES in fact wish to take prisoners.
Commander Jifo: Are we going to let them?
(Suddenly Commander Jifo's head falls to the floor)
Master Tano: Of course not, we'll take them by surprise and... Jifo?
(Master Tano turns to see Jifo's corpse)
Master Tano: Jifo!
(In his grievance, Master Tano fails to notice the assassin that killed Commander Jifo.....)
(....and realizes too late just how well trained the Sith Assassin is as he is cut in half)
(As Master Tano slumps over in his death, the others are beginning their take off)
Aanor Terrano (as he senses his masters death): NOOOOOOO!!!!!! Var, we must go back! We can't take off now, the others are dead!
Var Damar: Exactly, they are dead, we would not be able to help them in any way if we went back-
Aanor Terrano: I could heal them!
Var Damar: It does not matter, we have orders to report to Coruscant with the battle plans, we cannot afford to go back, I'm sorry...
(With their sub-light drive engines at full power, the heroes take off)
(The Sith Assassin watches as the remainder of his prey make their escape)
Davin Bastra (The assassin): Did you place the homing device on their ship?
Droid Commander: Yes Sir.
Davin Bastra: Then open a link to Jarvis Thul, tell him to move into attack position...
Hope you liked my first episode!
Tune in next time to discover the fate of Annor, Vhet, Ike and Var in Nemesis.
Well Evan, The 550th was falling apart. Nobody was participating in conversations so I think Michael deleted you so he could delete the group. How about joining a group called "Star Wars Movie MOCs". They are an incredible group and are formed only of the best builders. P.S. I left the 550th so I can't really help you anyway.
Good comic with a great storyline. My only advice [take it or leave it, I'm not an official comic maker either ;-)] would be to work on making your backgrounds and scenery fit into the frames as best as you can, so that the reader's eye isn't drawn outside of the action to your living room carpet, kitchen countertop, or what have you. Your sets are good, don't get me wrong, but a little photo-cropping would make them even better!
I like the storyline and the characters though. Keep up the good work! also, you might want to check out the "Tall Tales" group on MOC pages for lego comics.
Thanks for the comments. About the AAT, I know that the cockpit part is off. I'm going to make a v2, with a better cannon, more smooth looking cockpit etc. Oh and btw, my cockpit can hold three battle droids. It's just that I don't know how to make two more seats that can hold battle droids (do you?). Thanks again for the comments ~ William
Quoting Caleb Enns
ur series doesnt make sense... they're in the ship and then they all die
No, you're reading it wrong. Annor Terrano (the padawan), Ike Locke (The pilot), Var Damar (The captain), and Major Vhet (clone trooper) make it to the ship. The rest of the heroes are OUTSIDE of the ship fighting droids. It is the heroes that are OUTSIDE that die, the four that made it to the ship get away (at least for now.....).
Well, it's a good start! Good job on the scenery and the characters, they are both very real. I love the storyline and the plot. There's enough action in it to keep me happy, you just need to take better pcitures. Try using the MACRO setting on your camera for up close pictures. Please check out my Millennium Falcon, Commander Cody, and AAT please.