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Nightmares - Part 1
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COP NIGHTMARES
Intro: This is the first of my new comic series about the struggle between the Coalition Of Planets (COP), The United Nations of Earth (UNE) and the Empire Of Skaborr (EOS).
This comic is about a group of elite soldiers of the COP, and their missions and lifes throughout the war.
--------------------PART 1----------------------------------
Planet 0462 known as Ponthlar, occupied by the EOS. The once peaceful planet has now become a warzone between the COP and the EOS, The COP have unexpectantly hit very hard.
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[Two sides exchange gunfire] EOS on the left, COP on the right.

The COP Nightmare Squad take defensive positions against a tough EOS elite...

Who is happy where he is with his nice big gun!

Commander BK (Black armour), Thunder (Red- Not facing us) and Cobb strategise their move:

BK: "I say we do an offensive Jericho manuveour"
COBB: "I say Jericho plus grenades, there's only one of them!"

BK: "Yeah, But what if re-enforcments show up?"
THUNDER: "The changes are ASTRONOMICAL!"

KABZOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!

A Skaborr (EOS) has entered the game!
BK: "How the hell did he get there?!?!?!"

THUNDER: "I dunno, but lets go Jericho! You go for the fountain, I'll go left."
BK: "Agreed!"

Due to some flute of fate, the fountain is the only thing that hasn't been destroyed!

BK: "GO GO GO!!!"

THUNDER: "Aaaaaarrrrr!!!" Firing his gun.

The Skaborr fires its heavy duty laser at BK,

But it misses and hits the fountain! The blast knocks BK off!

BK gets up and shoots the EOS Elite soldier in the head.

THUNDER takes cover from the Skaborr's offensive blasts

BK swaps his machine gun for the dead Elite's much bigger gun!

And fires 5 heavy armour piercing shells into the Skaborr's chest..

SKABORR: "AAAAarrrrrghhhhh!"

BK: "He's dead! Okay, lets get back the the drop-point and organise a ticket off this god-forsaken planet!"
SKABORR: "Haha! You will never get off this planet in time! Ha.ha...haooo" [DIES]
BK: "Huh? That doesnt sound to good!, Cobb! Get hold of command, ask them whats up."

----------- Meanwhile ------------------
High above the sky of Ponthlar the Devastator and Dominance are dishing out some serious butt-kicking, with the support of Two Harbinger Battleships and 120 small fighters.

ONBOARD THE DEVASTATOR, Space Fleet Captain Redmond Deja is monitoring the battle:
REDMOND: "We are doing excellent! Tell Gus and Awesome that we are going to do another circle around to take out any other EOS Re-enforcement"
SOLDIER 1#: "Yes sir. Wait a sec! Sir we have recieved word from the EOS battle-net that they the odd's are in our favour, and they're start nuking the planet to bits! If they can't have it, nobody can!"

REDMOND: "Damned Fed! I'll bet the High Ground isn't to far of from reaching here either! Hows the ground-status?"
SOLDIER 2#: "Most of them are undergoing evac now sir, they'll be safe, but Squad 27N is in trouble!"
REDMOND: "27N?! Thats the Nightmare Elite Squad! We can't afford to lose them! I'll fly down there and get them myself!"
SOLDIER 1# & 2#: "Sir!"

REDMOND: "Don't worry! Get word to 27N Tell them Evac is on the way, get hold of Gus and Awesome, tell them we need to get out of this sector pronto!"
SOLDIER 2#: "Yes Sir!"

---------------- On The Surface --------------------
27N The Nightmare Squad listen to a transmission from the Devastator

WESLEY: "We're all doomed! Who's gonna feed my excleplatypus?!"
BK: "Shut up you sabnet! We'll find a way outa here if it kills us!"
COBB: "The nuke WILL kill us...sir"

COBB: "Wait! Redmond Deja is on his way in his own ship! The drop off point isn't far, lets get moving!"

The Nightmare Squad all run off, with Wesley moaning on about his excleplatypus.

-Mid atmosphere, a Haedes Nuclear Bomb is dropped [Its 1000x stronger than a normal one]

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The Nighmare Squad wait at their rendezvous point for the pick-up
WESLEY: "He's not here!!!
BK: "He'll come!"
WESLEY: "But what if he.... [His voice is overpowered by the sound of ship engines]

BK: "I told you! Its the Helix!"

The Helix 6 touches down, just in time!

The Nightmare Squad run round to the back...

WESLEY: [Imitating Flight Instructor] "Okay, please secure all lugage in the overhead.."

COBB: "Shutup!"
WESLEY: "Sir, if you are repeaditively rude I will have to ask you to step outside!"

BK runs on, the rear boarding ramp closing behind him!

REDMOND: "All here? Good, Lets get the heck out of here!"

REDMOND: "Take-off!" [Mutters something under his breath]

The Helix 6 escapes the initial blast, but it's controls are serverly hindered from the electro-magnetic pulse (EMP) wave generated from the explosion!

-Will the Helix 6 make it back to the Devastator?
-Will the COP fleet get out of the system before the High Ground appears?
-Will Wesley's excleplatypus be fed again?!
----------- To Be Continued --------------------------------------------

Okay, so it wasn't full with the plot and the twist...wasn't much of a twist...okay, there wasn't a twist :P and the Ending was kinda abrupt, but that will be concluded in Part 2.
But I though a few good Special Effects would make up for it!
Acknowledgments go to Awesome-o and Gus for their ships being in the star-ship fight picture.....and thankyou to the People who invented Adobe Photoshop and FXhome Effectslab PRO.
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Please Rate and Comment
And I am open for suggestions, guest starring and plot ideas, it would be much appreciated!
Thanks,
BK.



Comments

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  January 2, 2010
nice use of special effects. Nice story btw! ~m0s3s
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  July 27, 2009
nice, dude! how do you do all that laser!?
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  July 15, 2009
this is great man, do you think that you could guest star my COP sigfig after i post him?
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  July 13, 2009
could my Sgt Grel appear in BTW
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  July 13, 2009
could my Sgt Grel appear in BTW
 I made it 
  July 13, 2009
Quoting Ultramarine Skiver This was absolutely fabulous! The storyline, the effects, the twists and turns, everything! What do you mean by guest stars?
I mean anyoe who wants to appear in the comic (currently COP only)
 I like it 
  July 12, 2009
This was absolutely fabulous! The storyline, the effects, the twists and turns, everything! What do you mean by guest stars?
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  July 11, 2009
Very good. The effects have to be the best MOCpages has seen!! Great COMIC!!!!
 I made it 
  July 9, 2009
Quoting Gus Indo Wow, i just cant stop rereading it!!!
I hope that happens for my next part!
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  July 9, 2009
Quoting Gus Indo Wow, i just cant stop rereading it!!!
I hope that happens for my next part!
 I like it 
  July 9, 2009
Wow, i just cant stop rereading it!!!
(BK) ()
Nathan -032
  July 8, 2009
This comic is really cool and the effects are great. But isn't the E.O.S. out of the picture?
  July 8, 2009
Thanks for the comment. I have Photoshop 4.0, but I've never heard of FXHome Effects Lab Pro (but I'm going to defiantly look into it). 8^)
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  July 8, 2009
WOAH! that cool! what program do you use to make the lasers? mine are just comic book stlye...
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  July 8, 2009
i knew there would be some awesome FX well done this is a very good comic with some awesome craft, i need to see the exceplatypus!
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  July 8, 2009
Very nice. What software did you use for the blaster effects? Photoshop? Gimp? MS Paint? Please tell. 8^)
 I made it 
  July 8, 2009
Quoting Nathan -032 This comic is really cool and the effects are great. But isn't the E.O.S. out of the picture?
Yeah, they are NOW - but this part of the comic is set during the EOS war, then the other half will probably be UNE!
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  July 7, 2009
awesome. the mocs in this are great, and the special effects are even better. nice job!
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  July 7, 2009
Nice effects. Hope #2 doesn't take too long to come out.
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  July 7, 2009
Excellent special effects, I've never attempted anything on that scale.
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  July 7, 2009
Hey you're finally back! Great comic here. You probably don't recognize me but you and I where allies, and I changed my name to Aaron C. from Commander Hawk.
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  July 7, 2009
A great start. I like all the battle effects you added in and the space battle was especially cool. Can't wait to see part 2.
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  July 7, 2009
Wesly! Fire the grav-missiles and get us out of here! Nice story, and I love the effects, but you should only be fighting the UNE. NO MORE SCABBIES
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  July 7, 2009
Great comic, really exciting to read. But why not replace "Awesome" with "Aemowes" (Name of the Fleet Lord)? Still, very cool!
 
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