THE DARK ONE!! Read description:
About this creation
-[-=The Dark One=-]-
Part 1
Haunting
The dark one creeps quietly through the streets. His evil deeds unknown. He peeks into my window. He must be overthrown.
He wears a cape as black as a starless night. His eyes are all that’s light. They're so gray, they cause much fright.
What is he, who is he, where's he from? He won't tell me. How come? Look at all the evil he has done.
Is there a way to defend? any help someone can lend? Time is running out, it’s almost the end.
A war has begun, one that cannot be won. All I can do now is run.
Part 2
Alone
He haunts me night and day, I want him gone is all I have to say, I have to get rid of him some way.
I am alone. I feel like he is eating me away to the bone. In this deep pit i have been thrown.
Am i going to die? I feel like no one can hear my cry. You comforting me feels like a lie.
Part 3
Daylight
Help, i feel dead, all he does is fill me with dread. I can’t live like this, is all that has to be said.
Can someone get me away from him? The moonlight is getting so dim, with fear; I'm filled to the brim.
Go away... You cannot stay! Night is gone for ever now its day. Now, the sky is no longer gray.
The dark one was just me. My eyes were closed so I could not see, but you have opened them... and now I'm free!
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Soap MacTavish May 30, 2011 |
This... Is... INSANE!!!!! |
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September 10, 2009 |
I bow down to your awesomeness dark one. haha great mech, you have a lot going on in this moc, but it works for it instead of against it. The same can't be said for a lot of the mecha out there |
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August 26, 2009 |
Very cool. That's one big fella. Nice part usage all around! :) |
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August 25, 2009 |
...Ecxellent work! |
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August 16, 2009 |
ey goog, i made a new creation, he aint nut'n great, ye outa check m out, iv entered him in a competition, so i dunno, but it might help if ye rate em good for meh |
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August 16, 2009 |
I love the story goog, lol, bad dream i gues |
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August 15, 2009 |
Nice! I like the mech for sure, and the storyline is...interesting, yet good. All around good job buddy! |
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August 15, 2009 |
Quoting Ben Tice
Well Ryan as good as your advice to knight mare was..... your expecting G-D to just do it, but he doesn't always answer and you have to know he is answering "No" when nothing happens because he say YOU can get out of it your self. G-D is not are servant we can just ask do things for us all the time he is just something we have to appreciate we have bringing us into this world and letting us enjoy it. Personally most people I know who pray to G-D get "No" because people die for a reason and there not meant to be saved. Others pray for money and power those are not necessities. YOU prayed for light which is what G-D stands for therefore you got the answer "Yes" Knight mare is asking for a better life. In a way he can change that himself so is probably gonna get the answer "No" so don't let him get his hopes up to high..... and I hate to bust anybodies bubbles and dreams with this comment.
you are angry at God... dont you see... you wont even say his name... you fight back when you have nothing to back what you say up... so dont say a word... if you really dont have anything important to say... |
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August 15, 2009 |
Quoting Ben Tice
Well Ryan as good as your advice to knight mare was..... your expecting G-D to just do it, but he doesn't always answer and you have to know he is answering "No" when nothing happens because he say YOU can get out of it your self. G-D is not are servant we can just ask do things for us all the time he is just something we have to appreciate we have bringing us into this world and letting us enjoy it. Personally most people I know who pray to G-D get "No" because people die for a reason and there not meant to be saved. Others pray for money and power those are not necessities. YOU prayed for light which is what G-D stands for therefore you got the answer "Yes" Knight mare is asking for a better life. In a way he can change that himself so is probably gonna get the answer "No" so don't let him get his hopes up to high..... and I hate to bust anybodies bubbles and dreams with this comment.
when God says no, its cuz its something we do not yet need.. it will be in time.. if it is our chosen path... if you ask him into your soul though.. and completely give your life to him.. he will save you.
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August 15, 2009 |
Quoting Rugops Rhinoceros
looks like he has a pacifier i his mouth lol, looks awesome though
did u like the story? |
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August 15, 2009 |
looks like he has a pacifier i his mouth lol, looks awesome though |
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August 14, 2009 |
right man thanks:) |
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August 13, 2009 |
God will not abandon you... ask him for his help... tell him you need him... things are not going well?? maybe thats becuz ur missing something... ask him for his help |
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August 13, 2009 |
Quoting the king of KNIGHTMARES
ya the poem did really speak to me.and as far as god goes i honestly think that he has abandoned me and i don't know how to feel about that,i don't even talk to him anymore.i just wish he would make my life alot better again.and since you seem to be tight with him( for now at least)i was just wondering if you had any advise for me.but i as far as your mech goes and the goal that you have set for yourself,i'll give you my score of 10/10-good job.also i tryed my hardest to de how many points you had already but all that i could see was,your 5/5 score givin to you earler,so i guess that this would make you have a womping total of 15 pionts huh?!good job man and i'll even raise the my scale for you so that you have 50,nut your a really modest guy and i just supposse that you'll want me to leave things be right?well o.k.,then,well see ya and let me know when your on that roblox thing o.k.,so we can do some awesome things with lego.
whats your roblox user??? p.s. just ask God to transform your life... say " im ready, take this heart of stone, and soften it!" give him your life cuz he gave his to you... and read your bible... and what i do to keep things going is i write down my favorite verses.. and read them every morning along with my bible reading! |
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August 13, 2009 |
ya the poem did really speak to me.and as far as god goes i honestly think that he has abandoned me and i don't know how to feel about that,i don't even talk to him anymore.i just wish he would make my life alot better again.and since you seem to be tight with him( for now at least)i was just wondering if you had any advise for me.but i as far as your mech goes and the goal that you have set for yourself,i'll give you my score of 10/10-good job.also i tryed my hardest to de how many points you had already but all that i could see was,your 5/5 score givin to you earler,so i guess that this would make you have a womping total of 15 pionts huh?!good job man and i'll even raise the my scale for you so that you have 50,nut your a really modest guy and i just supposse that you'll want me to leave things be right?well o.k.,then,well see ya and let me know when your on that roblox thing o.k.,so we can do some awesome things with lego. |
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Ryan that poem was great, i really like the last line, and the mech is also great, its BULKY and it looks similar to your junk heap mech, great job again :D |
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August 13, 2009 |
Quoting Brandon Mull
that's really cool
thanks all... im trying to see if i can get this moc to 50 points... its a goal!!!! |
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August 13, 2009 |
that's really cool |
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August 13, 2009 |
Thou tis be a dual artist, what with that great MOCery at your hands and a flow of creativity, soft as a forest brooke, spilling out from your fingertips. |
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August 12, 2009 |
Cool!!!!! Can you check out my mocks. Thank you. |
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August 12, 2009 |
Nice job! I love all the tiles on his front. And nice poetry! A very enjoyable MOC. |
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August 12, 2009 |
Quoting Indiana Pearce AKA Mr. Spock AKA Killing You
Show-off. I KIDZORZ!!! IT PWNZ0RZ!!!
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August 12, 2009 |
Quoting Rocky W.
Epic win.
thanks... |
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August 11, 2009 |
Epic win. |
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August 11, 2009 |
well that goes against my beliefs... God overcame it... i would have not been able to do it myself... you see... i BEGGED HIM for his help, and he saved me and healed my of something the doctors said was impossible. it has to be a miracle... i believe what i believe and i have a good reason. |
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August 11, 2009 |
Quoting Taz Reyno
Im not sure if you remember me but I will be returning to mocpages soon and I havent been back for quite sometime and I thoought I would let you know spread the word if you like.
of course i remember u buddy.. one of the first bio-mox members if i remember right.. i was googoo the founder |
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August 11, 2009 |
Im not sure if you remember me but I will be returning to mocpages soon and I havent been back for quite sometime and I thoought I would let you know spread the word if you like. |
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August 10, 2009 |
awesome job! |
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August 10, 2009 |
You really improved Junkheap... although it looks quite static now. Love the head :) |
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August 10, 2009 |
Love the poem and the mech. ;-) ~Clefspeare~ |
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August 9, 2009 |
holy crap! that is amazing! dont leave!! |
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August 9, 2009 |
thanks you guys (or yall as we say down sout YEHAWW!!!) |
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August 9, 2009 |
It's a nice bulky titan |
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August 9, 2009 |
Wow! Lego and poetry, who'd'a thunk it? I really like this build. Kind of builds off your junk heap idea. |
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August 9, 2009 |
Into the darkness everlasting
Looking into the mirror
and seeing anyone but me
the demon's inside
waiting for release from this shell
searching for respite in this darkest hour
reaching out from my pre-dug grave
is it the master and I its slave
how can I be without it
I cannot, for the darkness is part of me
the anger feeds us both
creating the bane of our desires
many still misunderstanding
these seeming obsessions with death
but its not about death
it is about life
in the darkness immortal
in a land without light
I've accepted my path
say hello to the night.
Great poem and great Mech! |
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August 9, 2009 |
i think the very lest sentence in the very last part is the best... it says how im now free... |
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Infinity Life August 8, 2009 |
Very Touching. |
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August 8, 2009 |
very cool mech and nice poem |
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August 8, 2009 |
wow, that's huge! nice work! :) |
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August 8, 2009 |
Great mech! I am very thankful God saved you, perhaps He will use this to reach out to others. I don't know what else to say except I will pray for you. |
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August 8, 2009 |
This is most definitely my favorite of your so far. The colors look pretty good, the design looks sleek, but still full of detail, and the lighting is exceptional. 5/5 |
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August 8, 2009 |
Awsome! |
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August 8, 2009 |
Very well done. The creation, albeit impressive, could use some work. The poem, however, was a masterpiece. All that's needed is a melody as haunting as these words. |
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August 8, 2009 |
.....i don't know how to say this,your a fantastic poet,but as a story of how god saved you thats realy deep.....i want you to know that whatever happened to you in your past dosn't matter now. Jesus saved you.i wish there was something more i could say but my mind is blank. but know this Ryan my friend no matter what you did,what you will do,God is there for and so are my prayers. |
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August 8, 2009 |
Quoting Ryan Tennant
thats qute a moving story...thankyou for sharing it with me.. :)
your welcome.. i just thought i had to share it.. i used to be embarrassed of my problems.. but my problems made me a better person... it brought me better understanding of stuff... God saved me that way.. without that id still be his enemy |
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August 8, 2009 |
yeah i prefer not to... not now. Well il tell you a bit.. i used to be quite close to insane... like u see kids with problems, fears, near insanity, depression ... I blamed it on God, i mean, all that had happened to me, but in the end... it was all me... the dark one was all inside of me... it was me.. and God saved me a little over a year ago and since then iv had no problems. I am a new person. |
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August 8, 2009 |
thats qute a moving story...thankyou for sharing it with me.. :) |
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August 8, 2009 |
cool! i would like to know more.. but you dont have to talk about it if you dont want to .... |
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August 8, 2009 |
no.. its more of my life story... How God saved me. |
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dont worry i read the poem :) |
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August 8, 2009 |
wait! does the poem suggest that you were going into your dark ages but you arent anymore? quoyting "the gray skys are going away" |
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August 8, 2009 |
Quoting Ryan Tennant
:O hey ryan!!!!! i thought you left! this is realy good! big.. menacing... is it evil? wait... its obvious because of the name and the red eye and everything about it! i love the whole structure and the way it looks! i think this is your best mech yet! great job!!!! are you going into your dark ages??? please dont go!!! we need you ryan! 5/5
well im trying to make my last stand great.. from now on i will post.. but not soo often.. but when i post.. it will be good.. read the poem please. |
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August 8, 2009 |
this is sweet one of your best! could you see my new hardsuit? |
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August 8, 2009 |
:O hey ryan!!!!! i thought you left! this is realy good! big.. menacing... is it evil? wait... its obvious because of the name and the red eye and everything about it! i love the whole structure and the way it looks! i think this is your best mech yet! great job!!!! are you going into your dark ages??? please dont go!!! we need you ryan! 5/5 |
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August 8, 2009 |
Cool! |
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