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No Refuge: Prologue
The prologue to my new comic series "No Refuge".
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Music for this chapter:



The dropship flew quietly through the air.



It approached the unsuspecting city.

Pilot: Initiaiting hardsuit drop sequence.


The small mech on the belly of the ship began to lower as flaps on the side opened.

The hardsuit dropped down into the street below.



The dropship rose into the air next to the roof of a tower.



The door opened and soldiers began running out.

Commander: Go! Go! But keep it quiet. The other ships will arrive soon and we need to clear an invasion point.

Inside a nearby building, a young man sat on the couch watching TV.

Suddenly, he heard explosions and gunfire outside.

He got up to see what was going on.



Outside, a small mech and soldiers were wreaking havoc on the streets.





The man watched as the soldiers cam closer.

A man fell dead right next to him.

He looked up to see the mech right on top of him...

and woke up.








Comments

 I made it 
  December 21, 2010
Quoting Nate Gonzales That's nice and when i saw him wake up the music stopped pretty cool huh. It's like the tenses of the music rising then Wake up the music stops
Thats how I planned it. I've goten pretty good at timing my pictures and text with the music over the past year or so.
 I like it 
  December 20, 2010
That's nice and when i saw him wake up the music stopped pretty cool huh. It's like the tenses of the music rising then Wake up the music stops
 I like it 
  June 17, 2010
Man i see why u didnt move the body man the guy is dead i aint touching him ude get like a disease or somin
 I made it 
  January 25, 2010
Quoting Leo claw i just thought of something wouldnt he have at least moved the dead body from the corner
Well, I wouldn't have, so therefore: he didn't. Jake is based on me :P
 I like it 
  January 17, 2010
i just thought of something wouldnt he have at least moved the dead body from the corner
 I like it 
  January 12, 2010
That was great! incredible suspense! and the war torn bedroom looked awesome! nice bullet damage on the wall!
 I made it 
  January 11, 2010
Quoting Green Beret When will you post chapter one? It's been like a week!
Sorry, but life gets in the way sometimes. I'm working on a vehicle I need and a song to use (its much arder to find songs for this than Mythada). The rest is set.
 I like it 
  January 11, 2010
When will you post chapter one? It's been like a week!
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  January 11, 2010
Awesome, this has the makings of a great storyline, can't wait to see it unfold.
 I like it 
  January 10, 2010
cool nice story,nice looking holes
 I made it 
  January 10, 2010
Quoting Lord Lego 436 What I mean by "Risen Momentum" is that you should try to make new fans and try new things, not just make a comic series and get comments from your Risen fans.
Ah, ya I hope to get some new fans. But it might not be right away. Remember how long it took for me to start getting regular readers when I started Legacies?
  January 10, 2010
What I mean by "Risen Momentum" is that you should try to make new fans and try new things, not just make a comic series and get comments from your Risen fans.
 I like it 
  January 9, 2010
Wow! This is great! When I saw when he woke up, I thought that the invasion was an event to come. When I saw the last pic, I was in total shock, lol! Really nice job! Can't wait for more!
 I made it 
  January 8, 2010
Quoting Master Emerald Phoenix Alright!!!! YEESSS!!!! Post more!!!! Not to sound ungrateful or anything... I must say this is a strong and powerful intro to the story. However, since it was a dream, may I suggest a little technique that would add more to the story? Don't use words. Just pics. The whole lack of English would leave one trying to figure out what was happening, until suddenly you switch to a pick of a rotting ceiling, and then your final pick. That would add major impact to the prologue and pull the reader into the story farther to want to learn more. MEP
Well, words helped in describing what was going on... just for backstory reasons. It's kind of hinting on what you will find out later on.
 I made it 
  January 8, 2010
Quoting Finn C-Q Forgot to add- I like how the attack doesn't have large music, like it is silent, and sorta small, it reminds me of some of the sound tracks in Resedent evil 3. I like how the music was perfectly timed, when the dramatic part ending stops, he wakes up, and the sorta ominouse music plays as he looks around. Thanks for getting me in my happy mode. XD
It's my goal and pleasure. You're welcome.
  January 8, 2010
Forgot to add- I like how the attack doesn't have large music, like it is silent, and sorta small, it reminds me of some of the sound tracks in Resedent evil 3. I like how the music was perfectly timed, when the dramatic part ending stops, he wakes up, and the sorta ominouse music plays as he looks around. Thanks for getting me in my happy mode. XD
 I like it 
  January 8, 2010
Alright!!!! YEESSS!!!! Post more!!!! Not to sound ungrateful or anything... I must say this is a strong and powerful intro to the story. However, since it was a dream, may I suggest a little technique that would add more to the story? Don't use words. Just pics. The whole lack of English would leave one trying to figure out what was happening, until suddenly you switch to a pick of a rotting ceiling, and then your final pick. That would add major impact to the prologue and pull the reader into the story farther to want to learn more. MEP
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  January 8, 2010
cool i realy liked it
 I made it 
  January 8, 2010
Quoting Jackson _ wow i really like this! the creepiest thing i saw was in that last pic in the corner, was that a skeleton? if so...*shudders* you should make a group for this!*cough*invite me*cough* Ahem, sorry i have a bad cough ;)
There already is a group :)
 I like it 
  January 8, 2010
wow i really like this! the creepiest thing i saw was in that last pic in the corner, was that a skeleton? if so...*shudders* you should make a group for this!*cough*invite me*cough* Ahem, sorry i have a bad cough ;)
 I made it 
  January 8, 2010
Quoting Lord Lego 436 Just keep in mind, try not to ride on your 'Risen' momentum.
Meaning what? Don't make it as "rushed" as Risen, take time between posts? Or do something totally different from Mythada? Cuz I will have a smaller amount of major turns in each chapter and it will be very different from Mythada.
 I like it 
  January 8, 2010
Oh my gosh...one word...EPIC!
Nufalak of Mythada
Phazezorz .
  January 7, 2010
Nyeh, even for a prologue it did not set up enough intrest for me to want to continue to read on. Maybe it was the completel lack of detail upon one's writing, or maybe just the fact it was all wrapped in one sentence at a time.
Nufalak of Mythada
Phazezorz .
  January 7, 2010
We'll see. I'll most probably continue to read them through a lack of boredom, though I would suggest writing it in a more 'book-like' appearance, as it would help greatly with suspense and just overall apperance.
 I like it 
  January 7, 2010
Awesome! Those last two pictures were amazing, especially when you saw him wake up, and I was like "Oh, that's no fun at all!" But then I saw the bullet holes, and I was like "Woah." All in all, very impactful, skillfully done Prologue. Just keep in mind, try not to ride on your 'Risen' momentum. Try to achieve something new camera-angle wise, or story-wise. But still, Phazeorz (or whatever) is just trying to act all 'cool and uninterested, but I guess i'll give you a moment of my time out of "comeplete lack of boredom" (Meaning that he isn't bored at all...)'
 I like it 
  January 7, 2010
Oh shoot! It really happened! That was kind of a creepy ending there...
 I like it 
  January 7, 2010
Good teaser, you have me interested and I have questions, too. No doubt will be aswered in all due time...
 I made it 
  January 7, 2010
Quoting Phazezorz . We'll see. I'll most probably continue to read them through a lack of boredom, though I would suggest writing it in a more 'book-like' appearance, as it would help greatly with suspense and just overall apperance.
Well, close to book like. I'll have more detailed narration, more action, and dialogue after this. I kept the prologue vague so I could get the right effect later.
 I made it 
  January 7, 2010
Quoting Phazezorz . Nyeh, even for a prologue it did not set up enough intrest for me to want to continue to read on. Maybe it was the completel lack of detail upon one's writing, or maybe just the fact it was all wrapped in one sentence at a time.
Well, that's the style of my comics. This is also more of a "teaser" type of prologue. Maybe give it a few more chapters? :)
 I made it 
  January 7, 2010
Quoting Destiny of darkness (liam ross) oh this is awsome great work. so what happened in that guys dream was true. so thats how the city became deserted. the last picture was great with the bullet holes and the massive hole. great work.
Oh you ain't seen nothin' yet!
 I like it 
  January 7, 2010
Sweet!
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  January 7, 2010
oh this is awsome great work. so what happened in that guys dream was true. so thats how the city became deserted. the last picture was great with the bullet holes and the massive hole. great work.
 I made it 
  January 7, 2010
Quoting Matt Shack it looked like they were killing citizins in that guy's dream. -Matt Shack
Correct. The commander said they needed to clear an "invasion site".
 I like it 
  January 7, 2010
it looked like they were killing citizins in that guy's dream. -Matt Shack
 I made it 
  January 7, 2010
Quoting Matt Shack what is going on? -Matt Shack
Are you serious? I made it pretty obvious what's going on. At least as obvious as I can make it without it being cheesy at all. Try reading it again.
 I like it 
  January 7, 2010
I love it. It's all a dream.... or is it?
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  January 7, 2010
what is going on? -Matt Shack
 I like it 
  January 7, 2010
Capital! I can't wait to see what happens!
 I made it 
  January 7, 2010
Quoting Justin Acevedo so cool, i love how it was a dream or was it
More will be explained as the comic continues.
 I like it 
  January 7, 2010
so cool, i love how it was a dream or was it
 I made it 
  January 7, 2010
Quoting Nathan Watson It looks like he wet his sheets!
Nah, its just a dirty old cloth. Post apoc right? Things get dirty.
 I like it 
  January 7, 2010
It looks like he wet his sheets!
 I like it 
  January 7, 2010
The last picture is great, the music was over too quick but generally, perfect choice, i got the idea. For the air scenes maybe a blue background would have fit better. Athmospheric nice start.
 
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