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This is a Work In Progress, I like it so far, but I need some advice and constructive criticism... thanks!
About this creation


Reckless teenaged thief "Jack", on his pimped hover-cycle, pickpocketed ol' Gramps. But now our hero Chris Phipson comes to the rescue! He doesn't even need a ride to take down this kid... go Phip!











"Remember kids, crime doesn't pay. And eat carrots. They're good for your health!"


I like it so far, but I feel it needs some improving. But unfortunately I feel stuck; I have no more ideas. So I have decided to bring it here to my MOCpages "family" and see what you guys think! Looking forward to your ideas, opinions, and criticism! Thanks guys!




Comments

 I made it 
  November 24, 2010
Quoting Timmy Kid What about my ideas?
Um, well, yeah, the deadline is sorta over and I didn't finish it so thanks for your ideas anyways ;)
  November 19, 2010
What about my ideas?
Flare .
 I like it 
Pony Lord7
  October 16, 2010
Well to help out all bley will look bland try adding color to the bike and details like street signs, stop lights, blood spill... any thing to ad more color and intrest.
 I like it 
  October 2, 2010
haha..
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  October 2, 2010
;D I love me some carrots, but not from ol' Phipson. Niiiice one dawg. That base is so wonderful ;3
 I made it 
  October 2, 2010
Quoting Leda Kat I'm not sure why you feel you need to make it better, it looks just fine to me! I love the design of the ground surface, really creative and the photography is excellent and Phip looks great with his guns out. And you don't need anymore story, its obvious what Phipson is going to do with that kid and that carrot...
Yeah, he's gonna force him to start eating healthy I guess :P Thanks Leda! :D
 I like it 
  October 2, 2010
I'm not sure why you feel you need to make it better, it looks just fine to me! I love the design of the ground surface, really creative and the photography is excellent and Phip looks great with his guns out. And you don't need anymore story, its obvious what Phipson is going to do with that kid and that carrot...
 I like it 
  October 1, 2010
looks good, maybe add a side walk for the granpa and make the road wider, plus thanks for the comment on my creation!
 I like it 
  October 1, 2010
He should catch a western outlaw, I don't think anyone has done that yet.
 I made it 
  October 1, 2010
Quoting Mister Bones agreeance - 2 dictionary results Main Entry: agreeance Part of Speech: n Definition: the act of agreeing Example: Usage of the site constitutes agreeance with these terms. Sorry Flare, it is a real word.
:[ To quote Luke Skywalker: "NOOOOO" Sorry Matty Mason, thanks Bones.
Flare .
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Perry McShane
  September 30, 2010
make it bigger with a few onlookers on the sides, that'll spruce it up
Flare .
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Henry Tracey
  September 30, 2010
I like this moc so far, but maybe you should add more detail to gramps's wheelchair. I also woud suggest adding a bit more of a background. I love the ground idea! P.S. on the subject of carrotphippy, NO COMMENT!!
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
Nice technique - I just feel you should make it bigger on the sides and show WHERE/WHAT they are (on). If it's a street add a sidewalk or barrier or gutter. If it's rocks, add some plants... I just don't know where this is. Add something to show that.
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
I like it. If it's supposed to be futuristic, and that old dude has a lot of cash, maybe he should have robot servants. Oh and an safe that's been damaged/cut-open/that's been burnt to ashes. Or, if the stealer doesn't have weapons, try to make a... well, a thing that doctors use to hear your heart speed. I don't know what the word is.
  September 30, 2010
agreeance - 2 dictionary results Main Entry: agreeance Part of Speech: n Definition: the act of agreeing Example: Usage of the site constitutes agreeance with these terms. Sorry Flare, it is a real word.
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
i don't know what needs improving because its already awesome! but maybe you could add a tree, sidewalk,lamppost or something like that
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
I'm really liking what you did with the terrain.
  September 30, 2010
I'm in agreeance with Matty Mason
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  September 30, 2010
This is really sweet! I think I'm going to redo my entry, I hope to make it soon. I like everything how it is, good job!
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
I like that technique you used on the vig!
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
bank building more spectators cars
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
I like Jack's hovercycle, but from his expression, it looks like it could also be a flatulence ignitor.
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
I love the technique on the road, but i agree that a background would be nice.
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
In total agreeance with Shifu, below me. Looks, so far pretty decent, maybe some burn marks caused by the hover bike?
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
I'd eat carrots but not one from Phippy ...
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
I actually like it the way it is, but maybe it could use a backdrop or something like that. ~Waff
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
I actually like it the way it is, but maybe it could use a backdrop or something like that. ~Waff
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
VERY nice! And I mean VERY. Wow...I just realized something. I have that exact design for the base on my desk.
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
Nice! The road is great, i agree with the others on the background.
 I made it 
  September 30, 2010
Quoting Hans DendauwNPD See, I comment on your stuff without provocation. THIS is what I was talking about on my last comment, action. The cool road technique gives the scene a sense of motion. As for background, maybe a futuristic lamppost or pillar to help break up the 'flat' feel of the base., but it's not really necessary for such a small scene. Motorcycle frame for a speeder? I wonder where I've seen that before...;^)~H
Thanks Hans, I appreciate your ideas.
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
This is pretty impressive, I really like the effect you used on the road. I do agree that it needs something in the background.
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
See, I comment on your stuff without provocation. THIS is what I was talking about on my last comment, action. The cool road technique gives the scene a sense of motion. As for background, maybe a futuristic lamppost or pillar to help break up the 'flat' feel of the base., but it's not really necessary for such a small scene. Motorcycle frame for a speeder? I wonder where I've seen that before...;^)~H
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
The idea for the street is awesome, I love that. I would alter the vechicles to be a slightly different color than the street, as they are a bit hard to see. Especially the one the Red dude is riding. Again, great idea on that street.
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
Looks good only try to add a building or make it so their are pedestrians being knocked out of the way.Or make them inside a building
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
Looks good to me!
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
Very Nice! I like the hover bike! And the detail on the ground is exquisite! Keep Buildin' -MOCrazy
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
Beware Phipsons carrot of death... `Ryan
 I made it 
  September 30, 2010
Quoting Henry Tracey I like this moc so far, but maybe you should add more detail to gramps's wheelchair. I also woud suggest adding a bit more of a background. I love the ground idea! P.S. on the subject of carrotphippy, NO COMMENT!!
I like the idea of a background, and carrots are healthy, you guys don't seem to get that.
 I made it 
  September 30, 2010
Quoting Ford The Oldies Man awosme Flare but i think Phipson should have a banana instead he used one in a moc with himself.~Ford
1. I don't have a banana 2. Carrots are just as healthy as bananas :P
 I like it 
  September 30, 2010
awosme Flare but i think Phipson should have a banana instead he used one in a moc with himself.~Ford
 
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