Chapter 1 GET OUT ALIVE
About this creation
After Makuta’s takeover, and All Toa and Matoran were trapped inside Makuta’s giant robotic body, A small group of brave Toa thought out a well thought plan of how to escape, During the cover of night (while most outside patrols are sleeping) the Toa are planning to cut a large hole in Makuta’s armour to escape out of, The only way this would work is if Makuta is asleep, adding another problem of waking him up while the Toa cut a hole in him, If the plan succusses the Toa will have to deal with night patrols and any other threat that the Toa don’t know about
(As Tahu finishes off cutting the hole, and Cossy and Lewa help, Takanuva and Raxonax keep guard)
Takanuva: How the hole coming along?
Lewa: Great! We just need to finish off the bottom half and were done!
Takanuva: Great
Lewa: And Raxonax! Anything interesting happening?
Raxonax: *loads his gun* Nup, nothing
Tahu: FINISHED!
Cossy: Well this isn’t good!
Tahu: GREAT! It’s early morning! That means more Rahkshi patrols
Takanuva: Oh well that doesn’t mean we’re gonna stop the mission, LETS GO!
Raxonax: At least we know Makuta’s asleep!
Takanuva: Alright, see that island over there, that’s our destination!
Cossy: *sigh* Great this means I gotta fly you guys across
Raxonax: HA HA!
Raxonax: YEEEEHAWWW!!!
Cossy: How can you think this is fun, you weigh a ton?!
Raxonax: Shut up and fly, Lewa’s getting lonely over there
(After Cossy flew everyone over)
Cossy: *pant* *pant* You guys need to go on a diet! (No offence Wertman 8 :P)
Everyone: HEHEHE!
Raxonax: That was a blast! We gotta do that again some time!
Takanuva: No time to chat guys, we got company!
Tahu: Rahkshi!
(Takanuva is quick to act and strikes the closest Rahkshi)
Takanuva: Take this Makuta scum!
Rahkshi: Reeeeii!
(Lewa and Raxonax fire at the second Rahkshi While Tahu watches on)
Lewa: Got him!
Raxonax: Nice job rookie!
Lewa: who you calling rookie?
(The leader of the pack attacks Cossy)
Cossy: HA HA do you honestly think you can take me?
(Cossy is quick to react and grabs the Rahkshi by the throat)
Cossy: We’ll it’s your funeral!
Rahkshi: Rawr!
(Meanwhile behind Cossy a strange flash appears before everyone’s eyes!)
(Cossy jumps up, throwing the Rahkshi to the floor, He then takes his sword and slices its throat!)
Cossy: All in a day’s work!
(The strange flash behind Cossy makes a loud spinning noise and Cossy turns around to investigate)
Lewa: Looks like there all dead
Cossy: What is it?
Tahu: I don’t know, but I’m sure it’s not good!
Takanuva: It’s a Rahkshi portal!
Raxonax: A Rahkshi portal?
Takanuva: Yep, they’re portals that Rahkshi uses to transport to and from islands on Mata Nui quickly
Lewa: Then we better get ready for more Rahkshi!
(As soon as Lewa finishes talking a strange warrior comes out of the portal and the portal closes)
Cossy: What the?
Raxonax: That’s one messed up Rahkshi!
???: TOA! They must have escaped for Makuta! I must warn him!
Raxonax: MOVE AND I SHOT YOU!
???: I’m not afraid of you Toa!
Cossy: What about me?
(Cossy jumps over and grabs the strange warrior by the neck)
???: AHHH!
Cossy: Who are you!
Portal Guardian: I’m one of three portal guardians hired by Makuta to guard special portals
Cossy: Special portals?
Portal Guardian: Yes like this one!
Cossy: What’s so special about it?
Portal Guardian: This portal goes to another planet that Makuta is investigating to see if it is inhabited, I’ve told you enough Information now let me go!
Cossy: Fine! But you better open that portal again!
Portal Guardian: *sigh* fine!
(Cossy lets the Portal Guardian go)
Portal Guardian: You just drop on of these and it’ll open
Cossy: Hmmm...
(All the Toa watch the portal as it opens)
Portal Guardian: *thinking* Hmmm... it seems they’re all watching the portal, that’ll buy me some time!
(The Portal Guardian darts off hoping the Toa will be too slow to catch up)
Raxonax: HEY YOU, STOP!
Cossy: I’ll handle this
(Cossy extends his wings and glides over to were the Portal Guardian is, tackling him to the ground)
Portal Guardian: URGH!
Cossy: You can’t escape us!
Portal Guardian: Please just let me go!
Cossy: So you can tell Makuta that were gone! NO! You’ve helped us enough! It’s time you get out of our way!
(Cossy swings his blade...)
(...And cuts off the Portal Guardians head)
Raxonax: SUCK IT!
Cossy: Now let’s go through that portal
Lewa: What if this is a set up! And the portal will take us somewhere else
Takanuva: I doubt he’d have a portal that would take him somewhere ‘that’ bad on him, and even if he does, it’ll probably be better than this Makuta infested, rat hole!
Lewa: ...Yeah, I guess
Tahu: I’ll go first
Takanuva: Then go right through
(Tahu enters the portal)
Takanuva: Ok, Lewa you go after Tahu, followed by Raxonax, then Cossy and finally myself
Everyone: Alright
TO BE CONTINUED!
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PLEASE READ!
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Well I hope you enjoyed the first Chapter of my Comic
The second chapter will be posted soon :D
Also Credit for the Portal Guardian goes to Callan Lord of Fire and also for the main pic, Thanks mate ;)
I’ll post the Portal Guardian and my SW Coruscant diorama soon aswell
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Thanks for viewing I hope you like it :D
Don’t forget to rate and comment!
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July 22, 2012 |
It's awesome. But it's against the Toa code to kill, and there's a lot of killing in this. |
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July 16, 2012 |
no way you built the teridax bot !!!!! but how, this is awesome i cant believe i just noticed this. ive been trying to do that for years ( failed every time) |
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July 2, 2011 |
Cool chapter! I did start a story of myself. If you want to check out the first chapter, here is the link to it: http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/277597 I can't get chapter 3 through but enjoy the first 2 chapters for now. |
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July 2, 2011 |
Cool chapter! I did start a story of myself. If you want to check out the first chapter, here is the link to it: http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/277597 I can't get chapter 3 through but enjoy the first 2 chapters for now. |
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May 28, 2011 |
Really good chapter, although the fights are short, nice effects! Loving this story already! Going to read all of it now..... |
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May 27, 2011 |
i never read more than this chapter, so when i have time i will read it all, cuz no 1 else seems to be making any stories, and also cuz i see how you tied your own sotry to lego's just as i did! |
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eathuis 305 April 11, 2011 |
Loved it, very cool! |
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April 1, 2011 |
Good job but just to let you know Lewa can fly and so can the Tahu that you are using. I am also pretty sure that Takanuva can fly as well. So Cossy got ripped off. |
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March 1, 2011 |
Thanks so much Nick, I'm going to try and have Chapter 5 up this weekend :D again thanks a million ;) |
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February 28, 2011 |
I didn't see that you replied. but I can see why he did it besides who's self MOC actually follows that rule. plus if he had gotten away he would have told makuta where they were and they would be dead. I can not wait till the 5th episode are you going to post it soon I just can not wait. it is so utterly awesome |
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January 28, 2011 |
Wouldn't makuta notice that he had a massive hole drilled in him! XD |
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Cheesy Q January 20, 2011 |
MAN,I cannot wait for the next one. Oh, I almost forgot, the reason why I'm here. Cheesy Q V2 is on my page. :D |
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January 17, 2011 |
Quoting Nick Nitro Brick
nice but cossy violated the toa code and killed someone so now all the toa will have to hunt him down
Yeah I now and I'm sorry about that but there are two reasons why Cossy did what he did, the first is because he is part Makuta (if you read his bio you'll see what I mean) the second reason is that the Toa are at war with the Makuta and without killing him many other lifes would be at risk, So this is why the others are ok with at and he won't be hunted down, thanks for your comment ;) |
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January 17, 2011 |
nice but cossy violated the toa code and killed someone so now all the toa will have to hunt him down |
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January 13, 2011 |
AWSOME!!!!! |
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January 13, 2011 |
Great Jawb! Can I be included? :) Please |
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January 12, 2011 |
Woah! Very dramatic! Great job! I wish I can do a cinematic story myself, but I barely have the time! |
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Cheesy Q January 11, 2011 |
HEY!!!!! I GOT THE INSTRUCTIONS ON!!!! COME CHECK THEM OUT WHEN YOU FIND THE TIME!!!!! |
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January 11, 2011 |
SUCK IT! :D great job, i'll go on that diet after ill eat some cake...mmm, cake! :D |
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January 11, 2011 |
LOL! "SUCK IT!" I love that part. |
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January 11, 2011 |
ill go on that diet once i eat this cake...mmm, cake! |
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Cheesy Q January 10, 2011 |
I love the Makuta! I stopped following the story line when Bionicle ended and mata nui rising was so cool to me. but, the reason why I'm here, i was wondering if I posted instructions, would you use my self-MOC? |
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January 10, 2011 |
Thank you everyone for your comments :D And to answer some peoples questions The Main picture of the Makuta Robot is from one of Callan Lord of Fire's comic's. Callan didn't make it and nor did I, but who ever did is a LEGEND! |
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January 10, 2011 |
Nice story, it kept me hooked. The builds were my favorite part, you have some cool parts usage and color schemes here. I'm really interested in the main pic...did you make that guy? |
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January 10, 2011 |
Did you build the robot makuta? You definately need to post that as its own MOC. |
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January 10, 2011 |
Very nice! |
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January 10, 2011 |
great job its amazing |
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January 10, 2011 |
He he, everyones making serials now :D. Great job, I like it a lot so far even though it is a bit violent for the bionicle company XD. No, seriously. Great job! |
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January 10, 2011 |
i love it just there is one thing u r missing ME! |
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January 10, 2011 |
Amazing story! I can't wait for the next one! |
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January 10, 2011 |
lucky you to have takanuva |
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January 10, 2011 |
Good setup, interesting plot. And four characters got killed already? Wow. One thing though: use periods. You know, the dot on your keyboard to the right of the comma? Those would help. I hope I don't sound too annoying saying that, I'm just trying to help. |
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January 10, 2011 |
Pretty interesting. I wasn't much into the Bionicle story-stuff, but yours is cool. |
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January 10, 2011 |
Hey that's really good!!!! I think I might make some stories soon, but maybe not!! |
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January 10, 2011 |
Nice! |
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Chaos Master January 9, 2011 |
another story! yes! did i ever mention i love story's? well i do! and yours is no exception! awesome work, good cliffhanger and effects where sweet. make chapter 2. and make it NOW! |
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January 9, 2011 |
Nice- But you need Ignum in there (he should spice it up) ;) |
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January 9, 2011 |
Awesome chapter! :D |
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