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A Story Reborn Chapter 3 NEW ARRIVALS
Chapter 3 New Arrivals
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Our friends have realized that Makuta is coming to Bara Magna and that the entire planet is in danger! The Rahkshi that escaped the Toaís grasp has returned to Aqua magna and found the body of the Portal Guardian Cossy killed, The Rahkshi is now explaining to Makuta everything heís seen!
(Also thanks to new technology, Rahkshi speech will be able to be translated, enjoy!)



Makuta: So youíre telling me that a small group of Toa escaped from my body, Killed one of my Portal Guardians and ended up on Bara Magna with Mata Nui!
Rahkshi: Rawr! Reiii! Rorr! *Translation* Yes my lord, I donít even know how Mata Nui survived! Your plan was foolproof! But as we speak the Toa are growing stronger!
Makuta: HA! The Toa will never be as strong as me



Makuta: Then how did the escaped Toa do this?
Rahkshi: Grrr! Reiii! *Translation* I have no idea my lord, I only know that they are on Bara Magna with Mata Nui.
Makuta: Hmmm...



Makuta: Vezon! Get over here!
(Vezon emerges from the Shadows to speak to Makuta)



(Vezon bows before his Master)
Vezon: What is thy bidding, My Master?
Makuta: Rise Vezon! This Rahkshi has some important information I want you to listen to.
Vezon: Of course Master!



Makuta: This Rahkshi has told me that some Toa escaped from my body, One of My Portal Guardians is dead and that Mata Nui lives!
Vezon: What! Thatís impossible!
Makuta: A Rahkshi wouldnít dare lie to me!
Vezon: Hmmm...This complicates things...
Makuta: I plan to leave this planet and find Mata Nui! Vezon! Ready my army! Iíll be leaving for Bara Magna soon.
Vezon: Ah good! Iíll be right on it!
(Vezon walks off)



Makuta: Oh and get me my weapons!
(Vezon stops walking)
Vezon: Anything you say master.
Makuta: But before you do, deal with the failure!
Vezon: Finally, some fun!
(Vezon swings his arm down...)



(...And grabs the Rahkshi by its throat)
Rahkshi: Reeiii! Rorr! *Translation* W...What are you doing! Iíve done nothing wrong! I even gave you information!
Vezon: As true as that may be, You failed us!
Rahkshi: Reei? *Translation* How so?
Vezon: You may have escaped and told us this information, By you should have killed one of the Toa! Or have captured one!
Rahkshi: Reeeiiii! *Translation* B...But I!
Vezon: No words can save you now!



(Vezon snaps the Rahkshiís throat and throws his lifeless body on the ground, as he does this he says...)
Vezon: Failure!
(Vezon leaves and returns with Makutaís weapons)



Vezon: Here they are Master, and your Rahkshi army has been loaded into your body for transport!
Makuta: Good work Vezon!
Vezon: Before you leave, Makuta, I have one question to ask you
Makuta: What?



Vezon: The Portal Guardian, what are we going to do with him?
Makuta: Iíll just use my powers to bring him back to life!
Vezon: Hmmm...I donít think that is a wise decision!
Makuta: Then what do you propose?
Vezon: Well Makuta, as your Apprentice, I feel that our Portal Guardianís need...an upgrade
Makuta: An upgrade?
Vezon: Yes, the reason he was killed was because, when you created him, you didnít give him the power to...think for himself
Makuta: I didnít give the Portal Guardians that for a reason! That way they wouldnít betray me!
Vezon: I know Makuta! I feel that you need to take that risk!
Makuta: Never! I donít want them betraying me!
Vezon: They wonít Makuta! If you only give them a small amount this ability, then they shouldnít betray you...Well what do you say?
Makuta: Fine! But this better work Vezon!



(Makuta uses his powers to change the Portal Guardians, appearance, mind and also to bring him back to life)
Vezon: It will work Makuta!
(Makuta finishes transforming the Portal Guardian)



New Portal Guardian: W...Where am I?
Makuta: You were killed by Toa, and Iíve brought you back to life!
New Portal Guardian: I...I Feel d...different
Makuta: Your still recovering from your...treatment, Iíve given you a new mind, a new appearance a and new abilities
New Portal Guardian: Abilities?
Makuta: Yes, you now have the power to think for yourself, This means it will be easier for you defeat enemies, however it increase the likelihood of you...betraying me! If you do... Youíll regret...
(The new Portal Guardian interrupts Makuta)
New Portal Guardian: Donít worry, I will never betray you
Makuta: You better not! Now enter this portal and go to your old post!
(Makuta Opens up a Rahkshi portal)
New Portal Guardian: I only have one question for you before I go, Can I choose my own name?
Makuta: *Sigh* Fine!
Chessy Q: Hmmm... I KNOW! Iíll call myself... Chessy Q!
Vezon: Alright then
Makuta: Now get to your post!
Chessy Q: Will do!



(Chessy Q enters the portal and it closes)

Makuta: Good, Now that heís gone I will leave for Bara Magna.
Vezon: Excellent! As I said before your army is loaded, and everything is ready!
Makuta: Good, Now While Iím gonna Vezon, Youíll be in charge!
Vezon: Excellent my lord, I hope youíll enjoy your trip!
Makuta: I will, and when I return, I will have Mata Nuiís mask!
(Makuta flies off into the air, making his way to Bara Magna!)


MEANWHILE ON BARA MAGNA...




(Cossy and Ackar are testing out there skills in a Ďfriendly fightí)
Gresh: Whoa! Mossdeep you were right! It looks like your new armour, has enhanced your skills!
Cossy: Ha ha! Yeah, I think your right! Thanks again Mossdeep for the new armour!
Mossdeep: Hey, No probably!
Raxonax: Hey Gelu, Do you think Mossdeep could hook me up with some new armour?
Gelu: Iím sure heíd love to, but he told me heís running low on supplies, so...sadly I donít think heíll be able to just now, maybe later he could.
Raxonax: Alright then, as long as I get my armour.
Gelu: Hey, donít worry you will.
(Cossyís blue flames manage to overwhelm Ackarís sword and he drops it, Ackar then falls to the ground)



(Cossy takes out his new swords and holds one against Ackarís chest)
Cossy: Looks like I win!
Ackar: Ha! I guess you do!
Kiina: Wow! You bested Ackar! It takes a powerful Glatorian to do that!
Ackar: Well Iím happy you beat me, nobodyís done that in a long, long time!



(Ackar gets up)
Raxonax: HIGH FIVE!
(Cossy and Raxonax give each other high 5ís)
Ackar: What do you think were gonna do next?
Cossy: Iím guess Mata Nuiís gonna get us all to a safe place and find a way to activate this prototype body behind us, so he can face Makuta.
Ackar: Hmmm...I guess that makes sense, but Iíd still like us all to train, we donít know if thereís gonna be any more Skrall waiting to kill us.
Gresh: Good idea, buddy, so whoís gonna train with Ackar next? He is the best Glatorian to train with!
Raxonax: ME NEXT! You did promise remember?
Ackar: Alright then, just give me some time to recuperate!



(Meanwhile Takanuva is still getting over how he let the Rahkshi escape)
Takanuva: *Sigh* Iím sorry Mata Nui, I failed you
Mata Nui: Takanuva you didnít fail me, Makuta was going to know about us being here, sometime in the future, weíve only speed up his arrival
Takanuva: I guess youíre right, thanks Mata Nui
Mata Nui: Any time, now I need to tell everyone what were going to do next, if you will, can you please get everyone together?
Takanuva: Sure. *Yelling* EVERYBODY GET UP AGAINST THE WALL, MATA NUIíS GOT SOMETHING TO SAY!
Tahu: I couldíve done that!



Mata Nui: Alright everyone, I have a plan for what weíre gonna do next, If Makuta is coming here, then we need to form an army to combat him with!
Takanuva: An army? Donít we kinda already have one?
Mata Nui: Even this powerful armada insist strong enough to take down Makuta and his Rahkshi armies! We need to form an even larger army, not to mention we need to figure out a way to active this prototype body behind me!
Gelu: An even larger army! How are we gonna do that! [And howís it gonna fit in the frame: P]



Ackar: Well the nearest village is Tesara, There should be some Glatorian there were we can start to form our army!
Gresh: Yeah! Vastus, the first Glatorian of my village heíll join us, and heíll know how to get every Glatorian on Bara Magna to join us too!
Kiina: Yeah! Then we can go to Tajun, Tarix can help us as well!
Raxonax: If Makuta doesnít find us first!
Takanuva: Donít jinx us!



Lewa: If that Tesara place is the one over there, then I think we got a problem!
Gelu: what the heckís going on over there?
(The Glatorian rush over to the entrance of Tesara to get a closer look at the commotion thatís going on)



Gresh: Lance, whatís going on? Why isnít Vastus here?
Lance: Umm...Vastus is...Away, but weíre all here to stop these...people
Gresh: Who are these people? And where is Vastus?
Lance: The people just came through this weird portal thing and demanded information!
Ackar: Sounds familiar, can we talk to them?
Lance: I guess, but Raanuís busy talking to them so, you might have to wait.



Axxon: Hahli, I donít think your approach is working, maybe you should just tell him who we are and that we just want to find a way to stop Makuta.
Hahli: Alright then, Raanu we are...
Raanu: I donít care! Just leave Tesara, and the Vorox can deal with you, outcasts!
Archra: Vorox?
Ackar: *sigh* Iím tired of waiting, Gresh, Mata Nui, come with me!



Ackar: Raanu!
Raanu: AH Ackar! Can you deal with these outcasts for me please!
Ackar: Theyíre, no outcasts, there friends of Mata Nui, just like our new friends!
Raanu: What! *sigh* Oh I canít deal with this! Mata Nui do what you want with them, Ackar, I need to speak with you please.



Axxon: Mata Nui! Itís good to see you! We all thought that Makuta had...
(Mata Nui interrupts Axxon)
Mata Nui: So did Takanuva and the others! Iíll have to explain to you all what happened to me when I have the time.
Axxon: Of course my good friend!
Mossdeep: What the heck happen to his armour?
Lhikan: The only way we could escape was if Axxon took on heaps of Rahkshi, so when had time to escape, by the time he killed them all his armour was damaged! So Axxon just used broken armour littered on the ground to fix everything
Mossdeep: Whoa thatís harsh! Well Iím pretty good with that kinda stuff so I could fix his armour, but Iím kinda running low on parts so Iíll need to find some before I can do anything.
Lhikan: Iím sure heíd love that, but you should tell Axxon about this, not me.

(Meanwhile Raanu and Ackar are talking about how these Ďoutcastsí are friends of Mata Nui, while Gresh speaks with the other Glatorian)



Ackar: Raanu, Iím only gonna tell you this once so listen! These Ďoutcastsí are our new friends! As are the ones you came with me! Got it?
Raanu: Yes I do Ackar, *sigh* Iím Sorry I got so anger, I only want whatís best for my people!

Gresh: Strakk, Iím surprised to see you here! I thought Raanu would have made you an outcast like Malum!
Strakk: Raanu and I had an...arrangement! My punishment was to help rebuild Arena Magna, after the Skrall destroyed it!
Gresh: Since when were we rebuilding the arena?
Lance: Good one Strakk you just ruined the surprise!
Strakk: Oh, right...
Gresh: Surprise? What surprise?
Lance: *sigh* It was meant to be a surprise, everybodyís throwing you, Mata Nui, Ackar and Kiina a feast at Atero, once we rebuild it.
Gresh: What for?
Lance: HA what for, Are you serious?! You guys saved Bara Magna from the Skrall! That is defiantly reason for a celebration!
Gresh: Well thanks guys!
Lance: But donít tell anyone! We still want it to be a surprise for the others
Gresh: Donít worry, I...
(Cossy yells out...)



Cossy: G...Guys!
Gresh: Whatís the matter buddy?
Mata Nui: Is everything alright Cossy?
Cossy: LOOK!



Cossy: I donít think thatís a comet heading this way!

To Be Continued!

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Well thatís it Chapter 3 :D I hope you enjoyed it!
Chessy Q I know youíll be happy since your finally in my comic, Well kinda :P anyway like Iíve said before I wonít be able to put you in (entirely) until late February when HF 2.0 Comes out here in Australia.
And Donít worry, Iíll post my updated Cossy and my new Glatorian MOCís (You can see some of them in the comic) as soon as possible :D not to mention with a special surprise :D
Oh and Vezon is Makuta successor, If Makuta is killed, or when Makuta dies of old age Vezon will take his place as ruler of the universe, Or so Makuta plans!
I donít think that thereís anything else I need to say, if youíve got any questions, just let me know :)

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 I made it 
  August 11, 2013
Thanks everyone
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  June 13, 2012
nice work!!!!! i read these a long time ago but just now posting... anyway i loved this series!!!! make another one!!!!!
Ben Cossy
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Eathuis 305
  September 14, 2011
HA,awesome!
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  September 14, 2011
...and thats the differance between Mata Nui and Makuta. when the Rahkshi failed, Makuta killed it, but when Takanuva messed up, Mata Nui just forgave him.
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  July 3, 2011
Interesting..... A comet at the end and This is how Cossy gets to meet the glatorians. Understand it all.
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  June 23, 2011
nice hand Cossy! ShWeEt (sweet) chapter!
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  June 17, 2011
Hey, if you have time, could you check out my comic, The Untold Story?
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  May 28, 2011
Cheesey Q? A "comet" ("cought" Maku"cough" ta) You really know how to write your stories to scare ppl lol
Ben Cossy
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Chaos Master
  February 12, 2011
wait are you telling me this has been up sense January and i only now got around to it! ugh, sorry i completely missed it. awesome as always! can't wait to see the next one! poor rahkshi...also, i didn't know you lived in Australia. pretty cool, but aren't legos expensive there?
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  February 12, 2011
Thanks! Cossy will be up probably either today or tommorow.
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  February 12, 2011
In chapter 7, yep :D
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  February 12, 2011
BTW Ben, is Morack gonna be in A Story Reborn?
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  February 12, 2011
Thanks for commenting guys :D Nick, Teridax and Vezon aren't talking in space, they are talking on an island on Aqua Magna, Also Vezon is about the same size as Makuta, this is cause Makuta gave him his new size and power :D Chaos, Yes I do live in Australia Mate :D and sadly lego is double in price here :/
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  February 12, 2011
cool terridax but you should edit the pictures so that vezon is talking to a pair of red eyes floating in darkness. because vezon is inside makuta, and bionicles can't survive in vacum.
Ben Cossy
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Cheesy Q
  February 5, 2011
I cannot wait for more. Cossy's team s getting bigger and bigger. IT'S HUGE!
Ben Cossy
Cheesy Q
  February 5, 2011
I cannot wait for more. Cossy's team is getting bigger and bigger. IT'S HUGE!
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  February 5, 2011
great story. so far?
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  January 30, 2011
Nice work! You should photograph some of this outside if the weather is nice enough.
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  January 30, 2011
awesome story, cant wait for chptr 4!
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  January 30, 2011
Deleted scene New Portal Guardian: I only have one question for you before I go, Can I choose my own name? Makuta: *Sigh* Fine! Cheesy Q: Hmmm... I KNOW! Iíll call myself... Cheesy Q! Makuta: alright, whats up with the cheesy name? Cheesy Q: what?
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  January 30, 2011
Pretty good so far, you have loads of bionicles!
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  January 30, 2011
wow! you really have aTON of bionicles! i never suspected you had that much! thanks for the comments! wish you d live closer to involve one of your masterpiece in my city! could have been a funky riiiide! hey hoohhh!
Ben Cossy
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Toa Oblivious
  January 29, 2011
this is so cool i cant wait to be in it!
Ben Cossy
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Cheesy Q
  January 29, 2011
By the way, you spelled "Chessy" not "Cheesy" Two e's not one. I'm cool with that, but can you make sure his name is spelled right? sorry to bother you.
Ben Cossy
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Cheesy Q
  January 29, 2011
You don't have to bother changing the spelling Cossy. Everybody will know what you mean. :D
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  January 29, 2011
Quoting LegoBob 123 Cool! BTW, I spotted a mistake! When Takanuva yells, he says "everyone up against the wall", when in the last episode you said it was a foot! You might wanna change that :)
Oh right, Well I think I'll keep it that way, cause everyone up again the foot sounds odd :P anyway thanks for letting me know buddy ;)
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  January 29, 2011
Cool! BTW, I spotted a mistake! When Takanuva yells, he says "everyone up against the wall", when in the last episode you said it was a foot! You might wanna change that :)
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  January 29, 2011
Yo, Cossy! My instructions 4 Owl will be up in 30 minutes!
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  January 29, 2011
GAH! The suspense is KILLING me!! I love all of it, and I like Cheesy Q's entry. I LOLed. And while we're on the topic of stories, mind checking out the Rift Chronicles? It would mean a lot to me :) Can't wait for Ch. 4!!
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  January 29, 2011
Augh! Whats gonna happen next! Great cliff hanger!!
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  January 29, 2011
Thanks for letting me know Wertman ;) btw, Cheesy Q, sorry about spelling your name wrong, Do you want me to change it? I'll make sure I spell it right next time, again sorry about that buddy!
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  January 29, 2011
Like the first 2 chapters, that was also a nice story. I'm looking forward to the next part.
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  January 29, 2011
yeah, its epic! :D
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  January 29, 2011
Thanks for commenting about Cossy's armour :D Do you like it Wertman? Cause I'm very proud of it!
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  January 29, 2011
BTW i didn't notice Cossy had been upgraded! :)
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  January 29, 2011
well, if thats true, then vezon will have to look out for Aroxion... he wouldn't stand a chance. now for the main part of this comment... great job! i liked the way you introduced Cheesy Q!
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  January 29, 2011
AWESOME - fortrux is on his way *wink*
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  January 29, 2011
awsome
Ben Cossy
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Peter Crasher the Powerlord
  January 28, 2011
Woo! This chapter is very awesome! :D
Ben Cossy
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Cheesy Q
  January 28, 2011
Wow! You got a lot of people who wanna be in the comic ever since I asked. Sorry :/
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  January 28, 2011
Cool story. I love that makuta design!
 I made it 
  January 28, 2011
Thanks Owl :D Don't feel bad Chessy Q, It's not your fault! Infact Baron Von Ben was the first to ask to be in my comic. not to mention I love putting people in :D Are you happy I finally put you in buddy?
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  January 28, 2011
OK, it will be up by tommorow! P.S Thanks!
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  January 28, 2011
Your not being annoying buddy ;) and if you could post that, it would be great :D
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  January 28, 2011
Sry if i am being annoying, lol, i might post a page on each individual body part if that helps. 0V0 Owl
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  January 28, 2011
Urgh...Chapter 7, I'll have you be friends with Callan :D, And now I will start building Owl, are you gonna post any instructions?
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  January 28, 2011
What is the ETA?
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  January 28, 2011
Alright Owl, I think I've got an idea for how I'll put you in ;) but Legofreak, I'm not sure if I have the pieces to build 2444, If I ever get them I'll try to put you in but no guarantees
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  January 28, 2011
I rated it 5/5, I don't know why didn't say "I like it" on the comment below.
  January 28, 2011
Awesome! I love how you did the last picture! Say, could you possibly please put me in there somewhere?...maybe?... Hey could you come check out my new Bionicles I put up? http://www.mocpages.com/home.php/66213
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  January 28, 2011
Ummmm, I don't think i would be good as a pet, i could ambush the toa group and threaten to kill you.... *evil laugh* i could be a undercover toa too...
 I made it 
  January 28, 2011
What ever you say Callan ;) and Owl, I'm running low on pieces but I'll try my best to make your self moc and put you in, do you mined being someone's pet? or do you want to be a toa?
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  January 28, 2011
NICE! I LOVE IT! I love the clouds in the final pic. Do you think you can add me into a epicsode?(lol not a typo) I don't want to die or be bad, so can you see what u can do? 0V0 Owl
  January 28, 2011
Nah, why spoil the surprise! I look forward to it! :D
 I made it 
  January 28, 2011
Sorry Callan, You'll be coming into the comic in Chapter 7, If you can't wait that long, do you want me to post my Callan before I post the comic?
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  January 28, 2011
Awesome job! Is Callan ever gonna be in there? Fine if he isn't, but I'm just wondering... :D
 
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