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Storm of the elements ep2 the castle. (redone!)
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Raxonax:should we go there *points at some place*?
Nitro:yep,its really hot here.
Pure:its your head whats hot XD
Nitro:stop it Pure!
*jareroden walks in*Jaredoden:Sup guys?
Cossy:oh,hello

All:earthquake! (or a camera falling =/)

matta:help me someone is chasing me!
Raxonax:i won't help you, but you can follow us.
Matta:tnx

all:let's go!
Matta:wait for me!

Bane:*whispers* you know too mutch of the "project" so i have to kill you
Matta:glup

*Bane kills Matta*

all:whatta !"#&!

Professor Z:there's your money.
Bane:any other job for me?
Professor Z:kill Pure.
Bane:what's the reward i get?
Professor Z:100000000000 money.
Bane:deal.

Bane:i won't kill him immediatly i will spy to see his weakness,what is happening there?!

???:DIE HERO FACTORY;DIE!



Comments

  April 13, 2011
sorry man, i am very sorry. I thought you were older than me. At 10 then your story is good, needs "some work" but it's okay. I'm sorry for what i said.
The PURE *___*
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Toa Oblivious ,Master of Earth
  April 5, 2011
o_o
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  April 4, 2011
I like it. and guys, i think that you should lay off the comments. he's still quite young and he's not gunna have the best story in the world, but at least he's trying. Well done. XD
  April 4, 2011
what i meant by the story not making sense is the "die herofactory" part. It was just completely weird. Ok, i said the pictures are bad, but i must admit at least you can understand. Sorry man....now it's okay if you hate me
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  April 4, 2011
Bane reminds me of Sand Stalker :D and Cad Bane :P I kinda agree with the others, but it's not as bad as they say it is :D Can't wait for more :)
The PURE *___*
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Chaos Master
  April 3, 2011
good story! although chopperskull had a point, there isn't enough of a goal. i understand if the pictures aren't the best, but try to tie in some kind of point into it. otherwise it's not much of a story.
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  April 3, 2011
Quoting chopper skull um, 1, take better pictures 2) don't you think that is WAYYYY too much money for bane to get? 3) i'm not sure what is the point of your story, it has grat potential, but is too quick and not very descriptive. Read any chapter from my story to see how to make a great story! Sorry if i'm being harsh! ut i will give you a 2 for effort, cool mocs, and cool idea of a bane trying to kill pure, though i'm sure it won't happen...
1 these are the best pictures.2 no for Bane thats small amount of money.3 mocpages didin't allow some picture's to be uploaded =/
  April 3, 2011
um, 1, take better pictures 2) don't you think that is WAYYYY too much money for bane to get? 3) i'm not sure what is the point of your story, it has grat potential, but is too quick and not very descriptive. Read any chapter from my story to see how to make a great story! Sorry if i'm being harsh! ut i will give you a 2 for effort, cool mocs, and cool idea of a bane trying to kill pure, though i'm sure it won't happen...
 
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