The first issue of my fantasies series Eothain. Enjoy and tell me what you think.
About this creation
One thousand years ago the first explorers settled in Eothain and created there own countries. Falcadon, Persta, Romata, and Sandwrath. When the settlers got to Eothain
it was only populated by elves, goblins, and orcs. the Elves had three countries Eldthrain, Gatwood, and Rivreld. As the countries grew so did the hatred of
two countries Persta and Falcadon. The other countries eventually picked sides with one of the two. In a major conflict between the countries the leaders made various
enchanted weapons to help them win. The Dager of shadow for Persta, the Bow of Poison for Eldthrian, the helmet of invincibility for Romata, and the Neckalace of Light
for Falcadon. After, all of the items we're destroyed accept for the Dager, for the Dager was stolen by a sect who thought that the Dager was sacred. They hid it in a temple
somewhere in Falcadon and passed out of all knowledge. Nine hundred years later we join an elf named Arathorn as he's about to have the adventure of his life.
Arathorn: Uncle I'm going to the market and the pub.
Uncle: Sure just be back at dark.
(Later at the market)
Arathorn: Hey Sam.
Sam: Hey
Arathorn: Can I buy that quiver there?
Sam: Sure.
Arathorn: Here.
Sam: Thanks for buying.
Arathorn: I'm going to the pub you want to come?
Sam: No thanks I've got to run the shop.
(After in the pub)
Arathorn: Can I get an ale.
Bar Tender: Sure that'll be one coin.
(Later)
Arathorn: Damn I've got to go it's getting dark.
(Arathorn then walks home)
Arathorn: Why is my door knocked down? Oh @#$%, unlce, no!
Arathorn: No!
Nazrak: Ssshhhaaaa!
(Nazrak then pins Arathorn to the stone fence and
Arathorn the reaches for thr sicle on the fence)
(And stabs the Nazrak in the face)
*Shlink*
Nazrak: Ahh!
Arahtorn: *pant* *pant*.
Nazrak 2: Ssshhhaaaa!
(A ranger appears and he stabs the Nazrak)
*shlink*
Nazrak 2: *Hurk*
Eric: We have to go before more come.
Arathorn: Who the hell are you.
Eric: I'm Eric a ranger.
Arathorn: What where those things?
Eric: The Nazrak, the shadow assassins of Persta.
*sshhaa*
Eric: @#$% they're close, grab your bow and lets go unless you want to deal with more of those.
*sshhaa*
Eric: Follow me! Run! Into the forest!
(Later in the forest)
Eric: *pant* Ok they're no longer following us.*pant*
Arathorn: Whats happening I can hear screams coming from the village?!
Eric: We're being invaded by Persta.
To be continued...
Please Rate And Comment.
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September 5, 2011 |
A classic begin but i like the quality. Promising a potential good comic. |
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May 29, 2011 |
Cool, now that I'm out of school I can get around to reading these. Nice first episode, liking the characters so far. |
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it is to much like eragon with the uncle dying and going into a town and stuff. And Arathorn is to close to Arathon Aragorn's father. (LOTR) but other then that it was cool. good job. |
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April 11, 2011 |
nice job, sorry I'm late but I have been busy. |
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I made it |
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April 10, 2011 |
Quoting Mr Viking
Kay hope I didnt offend you at all.
No I'm not offended at all. |
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April 10, 2011 |
Kay hope I didnt offend you at all. |
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April 10, 2011 |
Quoting Mr Viking
Actually, I found them on bricklink, they are the Tatooine Luke's legs, and could I have a bow and a sword please?
I have made your character with a bow and sword so you dont have to ask any more. |
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April 10, 2011 |
Actually, I found them on bricklink, they are the Tatooine Luke's legs, and could I have a bow and a sword please? |
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April 10, 2011 |
cool! |
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April 10, 2011 |
GREAT! |
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April 10, 2011 |
Its okay I think that they are mabye the tech's legs. |
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April 10, 2011 |
Quoting Mr Viking
Like Yadap, Ive reread it probably 5 times, Sorry, I didn't word it well at all, waht I meant is, like are Arathorn's legs from the collectible Mummy? same with Eric and the Nazrak, from what minifig on which set did you get the body parts? and for the last question I meant will the mage who is training Eric be in it since Eric is a ranger?
I'm sorry I dont know where I got them all, however I know that I got Arathorn's legs from a Star Wars set in the late 90's. Also to answer your other question the Mage will appear in two episodes. |
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April 10, 2011 |
Like Yadap, Ive reread it probably 5 times, Sorry, I didn't word it well at all, waht I meant is, like are Arathorn's legs from the collectible Mummy? same with Eric and the Nazrak, from what minifig on which set did you get the body parts? and for the last question I meant will the mage who is training Eric be in it since Eric is a ranger? |
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April 10, 2011 |
I love this comic; so far I've reread it 5 times!!! Can't wait for the next!!! |
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April 10, 2011 |
Quoting Yapdap "Cyber-Tiger" The Unggoy
You could really do without the cursing. It makes the comic sound like it was made by a barbarian (and no I don't think you are a barbarian).
Ok the rest of the comics will not have swearing. |
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April 10, 2011 |
You could really do without the cursing. It makes the comic sound like it was made by a barbarian (and no I don't think you are a barbarian).
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April 10, 2011 |
Quoting Mr Viking
BTW, which legs are Arathorn's and which torso and legs are Eric's and which head is the Nazrak's? And will Malath be in it?
I dont understand what are you asking? |
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April 10, 2011 |
BTW, which legs are Arathorn's and which torso and legs are Eric's and which head is the Nazrak's? And will Malath be in it? |
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April 10, 2011 |
Very, very well done! If you don't mind me saying, it's a little bit cliche, but thats ok! Other parts are not so cliche, like an elf going to a pub, Tolkien would have a heart-attack! |
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April 10, 2011 |
I agree with the guys below! Very good first episode! The location and the scenes are epic! |
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April 10, 2011 |
Quoting Eric 'Hawk' Mickle
A bit short for the first episode. The sets are good, and the lighting was done nicely. My only complaint is the dialogue, it seems a little off for the time period. You don't really hear swears in medeial times. >Eric
Yeah I realised that after I posted it oh well in the next episodes I wont include swearing.
On another note do I need your entire team Foxtrot to be in my entry for the Insurrection or can I have just one because I was thinking of just doing your ODST sig fig. |
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April 10, 2011 |
Quoting Mr Viking
This is off to a good start Night Hawk! Just a couple of questions. First, isnt Erik a mage in training and how often will you come out with these?
I changed it now he's kind of modeled after Aragorn from the lord of the rings. I'll probably release one every one to two week/s it depends if I'm busy or not. |
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April 9, 2011 |
This is off to a good start Night Hawk! Just a couple of questions. First, isnt Erik a mage in training and how often will you come out with these? |
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April 9, 2011 |
Pretty neat. I can see its heavely "influenced" by LOTR. Also the classic "come home and find my uncle dead" is in here. Over all pretty cool though. |
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April 9, 2011 |
A bit short for the first episode. The sets are good, and the lighting was done nicely. My only complaint is the dialogue, it seems a little off for the time period. You don't really hear swears in medeial times. >Eric |
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April 9, 2011 |
Great job with the sets and the story! 10/10 |
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