The beginning of a MOC tag in the group The Medieval Lands. And my third MOC this week. I'll probably take a break for a while. But expect another SG Explains or another Fantasy MOC in the next week or so.
About this creation
Edward Wakes up
Edward: My leg! What happened?
Unknown: We’re safe. They’re not following us anymore.
Edward: Oh no. I remember now!
Edward: You stopped my execution…
Edward: You attacked the Count’s guards…
Edward: And you killed the Gate Keeper.
Edward: How did we get out here?
Unknown: You were unconscious. I had no choice but to carry you here to the wastelands.
Edward: But why did you save me? Why not leave me to die?
Unknown: You have an important destiny. One you must fulfil no matter what.
Unknown: You must kill Count Harald and restore order to this dying fief.
Unknown: Only you can do this.
Edward: I can’t. I’m just a serf. How can I do such a thing?
Unknown: Yes the road is dangerous. But I will show you the way. But only you can kill Count Harald.
Unknown: Follow me. I will take you to my hideout. There I will equip you.
Edward: Wait! You did not tell me your name.
Unknown: My apologies. I am known as….
Paul The Brick Engineer is tagged to build the next MOC. ;)
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Well written, but maybe the first picture needs just a little more detail to work. You play a risky game with the introduction pictures... Anyways, the creation just good enough to support a story, so I can not say there is something wrong with it, it just needs more of what it has.