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Redemption Chapter 3 (new, and better!)
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Episode three! I'm not sure if I added the old one before, although I don't think I did. NEW CONTENT YAYZ.
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Although Mira would never admit it, she had belly-flopped. She hit the water on her stomach after the forty foot drop, and doubled over in pain. There wasn’t much time to think about it though, as Dragonax dove into the water next to her and quickly pulled Mira beneath the surface.
The reservoir would’ve been peaceful if the situation hadn’t been so urgent. Shafts of sunlight illuminated the blue-green water, and small aquatic plants were sporadically growing on the walls. As the Toa and Makuta swam, ripples of light shimmered across their bodies. Mira’s thoughts were cut short by a sudden realization: she couldn’t breathe.
She grabbed Dragonax’ shoulder, and gestured desperately toward her mouth. In response, Dragonax grabbed her hand and, to Mira’s surprise, spoke: “You can breathe now.”
Mira’s gave him a look that was somewhere between “Are you crazy?!” and “Why are you holding my hand?!” She tried to last longer on the little air she had, but couldn’t. She looked at Dragonax, and took a short breath. To her surprise, instead of drowning she inhaled air. It felt different though, like breathing in a fog.
“How-” stammered Mira, “How is this even possible?”
Dragonax pointed to his face. “Mask of water breathing. I’m one of the only Makuta who can swim. As long as we’re in physical contact, I can share my mask power with you.” He nodded to where he was holding Mira’s hand.
There was a brief silence between the pair.
“What exactly are we doing?” asked Mira.
“YOU are escaping, I am defecting.”
“Why?”
“Do you want to go back?”
“No, of course not. I was asking you.”
Dragonax was silent for a long time. When he finally spoke, his voice was downcast:
“About a year ago, I was sent to kill a Toa. He was young, and it wasn’t hard to beat him. Before I... before I killed him, he said to me ‘Why did you betray the Great Spirit?’ I didn’t know what he meant, I always thought Mata Nui betrayed us. I asked the other Makuta, but they never told me anything. I didn’t believe them, but what could I do? I wanted to leave, to go somewhere far away from the senseless killing, but I couldn’t. Until now.”
Dragonax sighed. Mira looked at him, and was surprised that she actually felt sorrow for what would’ve been a mortal enemy.
“Ah, this is the one.” Dragonax spoke abruptly, as if he’d been eager to end the conversation. Dragonax led Mira to a large, grated pipe that protruded from the wall of the reservoir. He grabbed the grate in the middle, and tore it loose.
Dragonax swam into the pipe, and Mira followed.
“You know your way around here pretty well.” said Mira.
“I swim in this reservoir often. It helps me clear my mind. I also built half of it.”
“Do you- ACK!” Mira yelped, and let out a gagging cough. “What the heck was that?!”
“Um… you might not want to open your mouth in here very much.” Dragonax made a small orb of glowing energy in his hand, showing that the pipe was filled with floating algae and plants. Mira nodded and kept her mouth closed for the rest of the trip.
To be continued

Main picture by Connor Hoffman (whose name does not exist in Google's spell-check dictionary)



Comments

 I made it 
  April 26, 2013
Quoting Reaper the Ultimate . This is fantastic! Are you going to write any more?
Not for a LOOOOONG time. I thought of something that really needed to be in the first chapter, and some more story elements ended up being changed. Sadly, this project is being officially abandoned until I can get some more resources together, and fine-tune the story :(
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  April 26, 2013
This is fantastic! Are you going to write any more?
 I made it 
  January 27, 2013
Quoting Daniel Floyd Is your selfmoc like other Makuta where they are made of antitermis, have no inner light, and posses all forty-two Kraata powers?
Well, yes and no. My story deviates from the canon storyline a bit to make it easier to write, but for the most part yes. This story takes place around the time that the Makuta changed from bio-mechanical to antidermis. In my story, some of them are still organic, while others (like Dragonax) are antidermis. As for inner light, Dragonax isn't any different from other Makuta except that he's kind of a softie. They used to be good guys, after all, but they got greedy.
Dragonax lord of all things black and creepy
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Daniel Floyd
  January 26, 2013
Is your selfmoc like other Makuta where they are made of antitermis, have no inner light, and posses all forty-two Kraata powers?
 I made it 
  October 3, 2012
Quoting Toa Jaton Great chapter.Do you want to go smell things with me?
Wait... WHAT?! Oh, that was a quote. You had me worried there XD
  October 2, 2012
Great chapter.Do you want to go smell things with me?
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  September 8, 2012
Excellent! Keep it up! :)
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  September 6, 2012
Excellent description of the Kaukau! I like it very much.
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  September 4, 2012
Quoting Chopperskull (Who likes cupcakes) Dragonax to Mira in CH2 "My name is Dragonax and you're gonna become my wife !" XD that would have been funny. BTW, I finally understand your self moc, Dragonax being a morally "good" makuta. It makes sense the Mata Nui Betrayal thing. I can't believe not many ppl thought of that. BTW, Loving this story, and glad you are re-writing it because I'm not sure I read the original... :)
Thanks, glad you like the story idea :D
 I like it 
  September 4, 2012
Dragonax to Mira in CH2 "My name is Dragonax and you're gonna become my wife !" XD that would have been funny. BTW, I finally understand your self moc, Dragonax being a morally "good" makuta. It makes sense the Mata Nui Betrayal thing. I can't believe not many ppl thought of that. BTW, Loving this story, and glad you are re-writing it because I'm not sure I read the original... :)
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  September 3, 2012
i've finished my section if u wanna check it out
 
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