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MocOlympics Round 5: Stuart Delahay Vs Mark Erickson
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About this creation
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Category: Beginning and End: Build us a story... any story you wish and whichever genre you want but here's the catch... it MUST begin and end with the following lines...

First line:
"My name is Archibald Reginold Snegglepusenshire, and this is the tale of my last day on Earth."

Last line:
"So the moral of the story kids, is never trust a clown in a bikini who offers you a banana."

It doesn't matter how long the story is. It could be three frames or 30, as long as you
begin and end with those lines AND (here's the tricky part) have it make SENSE!
So here goes…..

My name is Archibald Reginold Snegglepusenshire, and this is the tale of my last day on Earth.



Of course, that’s my given name. My clown-name is Archie Sneggles and in actual fact it was the last day of many things. The last day on the job for instance, and certainly my last day in Circusville.



Circusville - You could call it a two-horse town if there was a trick-rider balanced between the two horses on her hands. Clowns, jugglers, high-wire walkers, every kind of circus freak and carny you can imagine.



You’d expect it to be a cheerful place right? Well only for the tourists. Have you ever tried keeping a smile on your face all day, every day while you work in a tent and the only affordable food is popcorn and candyfloss?



My job? Well I like to call myself a collection specialist. It sounds fancier than debt chaser and a heck of a lot nicer than toe-cutter or leg-breaker. It’s not popular work as you can imagine, which was part of the reason for my retirement.



I like to think I’m not one of the nasty ones but if some poor schmuck of an acrobat is behind on her rent or a clown hasn’t made payment on his new tricycle then, well, you got bills to pay too, right?



So this morning started like any other. I’d woken at my desk again. I was looking forward to sleeping in a real bed once I left all this behind and that dream was so close I could feel the pillow against my face.



I was fixing myself what breakfast I could find in my desk-drawers when there was a knock at the door. I wasn’t expecting anybody and it was my last day, but business is business. I brushed crumbs off my vest and called to come in.



The door swung inwards and there she stood like mischief in a red dress. I knew in my gut this would be trouble but I can’t resist a pretty face – at least, what I could see of it over her luxuriant beard. She said her name was Anita Shave. Well it sounded true.



She sat down and told me her tale of woe – everybody has one when they come to me. I expected it to be a husband, a ‘soon to be ex’ perhaps. When she told me it was Chortles Punchinello who owed her money I nearly threw her out. I probably should have done.



Me and Chortles go back a ways. In my line of work you meet some nasty characters, sometimes end up working for them too. I’d collected a few debts for Chortles but I avoided him out of choice. I’d heard one too many stories about people found choked on a candy-apple or hung from a trapeze.



Ms Shave was owed for work as bearded lady in one of Chortle’s sideshows and he was reluctant to pay up. It seems like improper advances were made towards her and the money wasn’t coming until she played along. What a lousy deal. That money was her way out of here. What little she had now, she was pushing on me to speak to Chortles. By this point she was crying. I was going to regret this…



So there I am, two hours later driving my funny-car down to Chortle’s place. I’d squared away any other jobs and today should have been packing up the office, maybe some goodbye drinks with a couple of monkeys and a knife thrower I know. Instead I’d made a couple of calls and now I’m heading towards trouble because of a dame with a beard.



I got the usual warm welcome from Chortle’s boys. Real charmers like Tiny Pete and Bert the juggler. They ushered me in.



I found Chortles in his bath. I say bath but I’ve seen high-divers land in smaller tubs. The nerve of the guy, got dames in their swimsuits feeding him fruit in a marble tub while I beg for the wages of his employee.



Needless to say he was not very accommodating. For a clown he has a lousy sense of humour. One of these girls was offering him the tray while his boys give me his answer.



Two or three times just to make sure I heard him.



I was shown out in a non-too friendly way. As I felt the concrete against my face I figured the best thing to do would be to go give Ms Shave her money back and explain that she was better off just getting as far away from here as possible, just like I was going to do.



Of course I don’t always do the best thing. I am a clown right?



That felt good but now I knew I’d have those boys after me quicker than a hiccup. I jumped in the car and gunned it.



Sure enough, soon those thugs came straight after me.



Now it was on me to lose ‘em. I headed for the hills, literally



It’s a real good job most circus folks can’t shoot straight or I’d be done for. I saw the bend coming and those boys were so close I could hear the squeakers in their noses. This was it…



Too late to turn, I crashed through the barrier



Seconds later, they came straight through after me. It’s a real shame there’s nothing else I could do……
And that was indeed the last day of Archie Sneggles. I said before I don’t always do the best thing right?



But that doesn’t mean I’m stupid kiddo.



And it doesn’t mean I play fair. Those calls I made came in real handy - That girl with the fruit at Chortles settled a big debt to me right there. It helps if you know people in this town. And monkeys too.



By the time anybody found him, Chortles will have had an ‘accident’ and drowned in his too-deep tub. Some of his cash and jewellery was missing but not enough so it would be noticed. Ms Shave got a visitor with some cash and the sad news that I had a motor accident. She left town that night and never looked back.

And so did I. A new name, Archie Sneggles is gone. I’d always planned to leave Circusville behind and start afresh but this one day gave me a chance to deal with Chortles Punchinello on the way out. I couldn’t clean up Circusville, but I can take the chance to get rid of a dirty rat and feel pretty good about myself.



So the moral of the story kids, is never trust a clown in a bikini who offers you a banana.

4th Wall/ Notes

I chuckled for a good while when I read this category. It reminded me of Dennis Price’s ‘Morton Zuckerman – Detective Chef’ category a few years ago. In the end, the only way to proceed was obviously with a clown-noir double-cross.

Some people didn’t find this so funny. The title of the MOC states I am vs. Mark Erickson, but that’s only for the rules as Mark stated he had withdrawn for his own reasons. I suspect those reasons had as much to do with building for the Colossal Castle Contest as they did with any real moral outrage. Too bad, it would have been an excellent test against a really good builder.

On Morals, I would like to quote one Charles Darwin: “The highest possible stage in moral culture is when we recognize that we ought to control our thoughts.”

I don’t think this is vulgar or degrading, but if you do, keep it to yourself – I’ve had enough of drama. This reaction, including what I have found to be unnecessary pontificating by some, has ruined this round for me – I’m not really proud of this build and I didn't finish it. Having no opponent has sapped my will to build anything of value and made a category that I thought would be fun a real chore. I took my foot off the pedal straight away – which of course means if Mark has a change of heart last minute then I probably deserve to get beaten, but hey, that’s how I now feel about my favourite Lego event of the year. So thanks for that.

Thanks again to Chris and his able band of judges. Good luck to everybody in R5.

Thanks for looking.



Comments

 I like it 
  October 28, 2013
what a story!! i will remember that moral for the rest of my life! ;P also some great building - a bit late (a year out) but, hey, a comment is a comment.... =D
 I like it 
  December 4, 2012
I find this excellent! I read through the whole sorry discussion and I can understand you desillusion with the whole thing! Nevertheless I find this MOC highly original and very well done. Anyway the past is the past; Good luck in the future (rounds)!
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  December 1, 2012
Oh, WOW! I loved this! Your story fit the category perfectley, and was funny and intriguing as well. Things like the chair, the coat/hat rack, and the window blinds were all mind-blowingly creative! I think you did well, even though you doubt yourself, I hope you win! --Jesus saves, God bless <><
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  November 25, 2012
Even though you said you lost your drive for the category, you really had some outstanding parts - the desk lamp and chairs in the office were excellent, the facade to Chortle’s place was really well done. There were so many great details that I went back through all the pictures twice just to see what other details I missed.
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  November 24, 2012
Absolutely fantastic. I loved the story, and I found myself reading through it an dmissing some of the photos! Glad I checked back, great builds too!
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  November 24, 2012
Stu, first I'd like to say congratulations on advancing! If we can both thrash our opponents in Round 6, then we can take Team GB all the way and have an all-British final! That would show everyone whose boss! Let us drink our tea, sing the national anthem a few times, and go do us some building! Good luck my friend!
 I made it 
  November 22, 2012
Quoting Mark Kelso Regardless of all the extraneous nonsense and drama, this MOC, at it's core, is pure awesome. Great building with terrific story telling...absolutely loved it!
Thanks Mark, you are a gent!
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  November 22, 2012
Regardless of all the extraneous nonsense and drama, this MOC, at it's core, is pure awesome. Great building with terrific story telling...absolutely loved it!
 I made it 
  November 22, 2012
Quoting Dennis Price That was hilarious (and thanks for the shoutout about the Morton Zuckerman category). Well built, well told. Love the blinds and I'm going to steal them and not give you credit for it (I think it's so stupid how people get their knickers in a twist about things like that). Very imaginative mix of genre elements here; is it bad that I heard Humphrey Bogart in voice over? Oh well, carry on. Skyfall was excellent, particularly the part where the CIA rebuilds Bond with bionic parts ...
Hahaha, you're welcome Dennis and steal away! I'm sure there is very little truly original done in Lego in terms of construction at least. And no, it's not bad that you heard Bogey in voice-over, but you have to imagine him in a red nose and make-up for the full effect!
 I made it 
  November 22, 2012
Quoting Mister Bones ‘Ello Stu. I know for the most part that I have departed these fine pages, but I popped in to get some tree ideas (Hans’ MOTD is a good design I must say) and saw this gem on the explore page. The build was vintage Stu, funny, well thought out and just a darn fine pleasure to read. I must say, I do find it funny that the drama still persists on these pages and that the same people still perpetuate said drama. Glad I “left”. It always amazes me how brave some people are when they are posting on a website and not face-to face with the person. I doubt most of the spineless arse holes who engage in such behavior would ever dare confront someone to their face, but alas, that seems to be our global society nowadays. At any rate, had to log in and give my 2 pesos and tell you what a great story and build you created here. Best of luck moving forward! Now……..back to looking for trees………
Thanks for taking the time out to comment mate, greatly appreciated. Unfortunately we do still have a free-roaming troll or two wandering around and a few dramatics have spilled out of the contest but I still like this site as a community and refuse to let others ruin my enjoyment of it.
Delatron 3000
Chris Melby
  November 21, 2012
Like I said, whinny mime. ;)
 I like it 
  November 21, 2012
That was hilarious (and thanks for the shoutout about the Morton Zuckerman category). Well built, well told. Love the blinds and I'm going to steal them and not give you credit for it (I think it's so stupid how people get their knickers in a twist about things like that). Very imaginative mix of genre elements here; is it bad that I heard Humphrey Bogart in voice over? Oh well, carry on. Skyfall was excellent, particularly the part where the CIA rebuilds Bond with bionic parts ...
 I like it 
  November 21, 2012
‘Ello Stu. I know for the most part that I have departed these fine pages, but I popped in to get some tree ideas (Hans’ MOTD is a good design I must say) and saw this gem on the explore page. The build was vintage Stu, funny, well thought out and just a darn fine pleasure to read. I must say, I do find it funny that the drama still persists on these pages and that the same people still perpetuate said drama. Glad I “left”. It always amazes me how brave some people are when they are posting on a website and not face-to face with the person. I doubt most of the spineless arse holes who engage in such behavior would ever dare confront someone to their face, but alas, that seems to be our global society nowadays. At any rate, had to log in and give my 2 pesos and tell you what a great story and build you created here. Best of luck moving forward! Now……..back to looking for trees………
 I made it 
  November 21, 2012
Quoting Chris Melby Like I said, whinny mime. ;)
Wow, two comments in as many days - I do feel lucky! I'm assuming you are being clever by continuing to mispell 'Whiny' Chris. Keep it up, you must be the funniest person in your house! Unless anyone else lives there ;) Thanks again for your interest. I look forward to these moments. Bye!
 I made it 
  November 21, 2012
Quoting Chris Melby whinny mime
Ooh hello Chris, I wondered where you were! Thanks for taking the time to give us some more wonderful, insightful comments. Glad to see you are staying active and that you maintain your keen interest in me, but for the life of me I still can't think why? I assumed you were desperate for attention but you are actually a decent builder so you must get plenty of comments from that? Some other failure or inadequacy then? Still, it's nice to hear from you and I hope you can keep up the slightly sad, poorly spelled comments for me as I love a good chuckle. You take care now!
Delatron 3000
Chris Melby
  November 20, 2012
whinny mime
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  November 20, 2012
somehow, you coincidentally managed to get the theme for a comedian, and you excelled! congrats on advancing to the semis!
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  November 20, 2012
See you in the quarterfinals!
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  November 20, 2012
You know, I found this actually quite clean. Too bad your opponent had to withdrawal. Nice build!
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  November 20, 2012
Quoting Stuart Delahay Congratulations Tom, it's you and me in the semi-finals then! Well done on advancing and good luck to you.
I can't believe I'm there for my first contest (except for a local contest in 1990... God I'm old!). And I'm facing such a fine builder and storyteller! Can't wait for the categories! Very best of luck to you too, let's make this a memorable matchup!
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  November 19, 2012
I just love every single bit of this, from the clown-noir storytelling to the fantastic colourful set pieces and those wonderful minifigs. An artist is never truly happy with their work and feels it is never finished, but from where I'm sitting this is perfection in a bikini. Way to go man.
 I like it 
  November 19, 2012
Ahhhhh yes.....who was that handsome pirate fellow you speak of? His dashing name is right on the tip of my tongue..... LOL It sure would be great to go up against you again mate....though this time the stakes would be a bit higher. I'm hoping to squeeze through here, but it will be the tightest squeeze yet. I haven't even pictured myself being in the next round....let alone the final. :(
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  November 19, 2012
Quoting Tom Remy Once again, wonderful story, humour and builds! Mixing clowns and mob, who would have thought of that?! It looks pretty finished to me, a creation you can be proud of! Cheer up! New round, new opponent (LWC or me :S), now all you need is put the whole drama behind you and HAVE FUN! Something you usually seem to achieve very well. Good luck with... er... Never mind!
Thanks Tom, I have cheered up now! Good luck to you too.
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  November 19, 2012
Quoting David Roberts Wonderfully creative and funny, both the story and the builds too. I like the colourful street, with its changing characters and the technique for the office blinds.
Quoting Nick Barrett Great build and story; it's a pity you couldn't enjoy it... still let's not go there. Very best of luck in R6 - Go Team GB!
Quoting Stuart Lucas Ahh, it's a real shame Mark didn't post an entry even though I doubt he'd have stood a chance against this. Clown noir? Brilliant. Your story-telling is as top-notch as ever and there's lots of details to love: the venetian blind, the clown cars, the poison bottle, the chain of monkeys to name but a few. Go MOC Olympics team GB!
Thank you fine British gentlemen. I shall maintain my stiff upper lip and fight them on the beaches! Or something. Go Team GB!
 I made it 
  November 19, 2012
Quoting Mr. Xenomurphy I should be working for half an hour already, but I couldn't resist. I had to read your story and it was worth every minute. Combining the most colourful world possible with the most monochromatic world is pure genius. I presume your opponent wouldn't have had a chance - you are a born storyteller and you can build in more than one category - but it is a bit sad how this all went. Nevertheless, you gave us a whole bunch of creations with enjoyable details and building techniques, an idea that should be converted into a tv series and a very tasteful story. Thank you.
Thanks Thor, you are way too kind.
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  November 19, 2012
Quoting Heath 'kik36' Flor LMFAO brilliant Stu! Good luck getting into the next round.....oh wait....nvm! Lucky! I never get a pass!
Good luck to you too mate. Hmmm, I must admit I have had a pass before - two years ago. That year I got to the final.... here's hoping, but my semi-final opponent that year is on the other half of the draw this year. What was his name again?
 I made it 
  November 19, 2012
Quoting Chris Phipson ...'Cause you're the Stu, and you're... Awesome. Dude, that was HILARIOUS (and very well built too)! I know it's not ideal circumstances but... welcome to round 6 and the final four! ~ Chris.
Thanks John! Keep up the thuganomics!
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  November 19, 2012
Quoting Thoy Bradley Excellent Job Mr Delahay! If you hadn't mentioned that this wasn't finished - I would never have known. I can empathise with you about going through with no challenger, but not in the circumstances that caused it. You did a great build and I hope those who were anti the category so much learn a valid lesson through seeing what you have produced. Well done and GL in R6! ~Thoy
Thanks Thoy it's greatly appreciated. I planned a lot more in terms of scenery for the chase scenes and finessing the building fronts. Then i took a night off to watch Skyfall instead!
 I like it 
  November 19, 2012
While you many not be pleased, I think it's safe to say the MOCpages community at large is stunned by this creation. The story is simultaneously witty, funny, and darkly serious all at once. The builds are perfectly matched and wonderfully done. Never fun to win with a pass, but I wish you profound luck in Round 6. P.S. Chortles looks like my sig-fig o.0
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  November 19, 2012
Quoting LukeClarenceVan The Revanchist Fantastic work Stuart, I've been looking forward to this and you didn't disappoint. The builds are excellent, your use of colour is gutsy but perfect. I really like the office too, the P.I. shot was hilarious. Of course, the story is phenomenal. A very enjoyable way to spend a few minutes, I really like your take on the category. A pity about all that you mentioned in the fourth wall section, the next round should be less controversial.
Here's hoping! And thanks again for the kind messages on Flickr.
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  November 19, 2012
Quoting Dave Kaleta Stu, Gorgeous story and visuals to boot! I love the clown-noir ascetic you created. Speaking of which... does the clown car still exist? Too bad you couldn't use it in this story. I'm rootin' for ya pal! ~Dave
Thanks Dave, and yes, the car is alive and well, but it wouldn't have been fair to put your work in here - a crying shame as i would be a great fit. Still, the clown flame is rekindled.....
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  November 19, 2012
Stu, Gorgeous story and visuals to boot! I love the clown-noir ascetic you created. Speaking of which... does the clown car still exist? Too bad you couldn't use it in this story. I'm rootin' for ya pal! ~Dave
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  November 19, 2012
LOL! I've been looking forward to see what you bring to the table for this category, and you didn't disappoint! Very well done, the whole Circusville idea is great.
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  November 19, 2012
Stu, this is inspired, even better than the last round. Funny and clever at the same time. I also love all that multicoloured building.
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  November 19, 2012
This story is fantastic, really good job. About the build : I remember the P.I. office with goor details, and a lovely colorful scenery. I do think you deserve final four.
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  November 19, 2012
Once again, wonderful story, humour and builds! Mixing clowns and mob, who would have thought of that?! It looks pretty finished to me, a creation you can be proud of! Cheer up! New round, new opponent (LWC or me :S), now all you need is put the whole drama behind you and HAVE FUN! Something you usually seem to achieve very well. Good luck with... er... Never mind!
 I like it 
  November 19, 2012
Some great humor and excellent builds! I particularly liked the colorful sidewalks (so fitting for the subject matter) and the blinds in the office (might be borrowing that technique sometime, credit given of course). Well done Mr. Delahay, and I would wish you luck, but it seems you don't need it. ;)
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  November 19, 2012
Hilarious story!
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  November 19, 2012
Just delightful :)
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  November 19, 2012
i would have liked to see an opponent here but it is what it is. You managed a great and colourful build and managed to connect the lines well. Very well done ... welcome to round 6!
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  November 19, 2012
I expected no less than awesome form you, and you delivered. The street scenes are just fantastic, and every detail is spot on. I am sorry that you had no competition, but Round 6 will be a toughie so good luck in that.
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  November 19, 2012
Wonderfully creative and funny, both the story and the builds too. I like the colourful street, with its changing characters and the technique for the office blinds.
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  November 19, 2012
Great build and story; it's a pity you couldn't enjoy it... still let's not go there. Very best of luck in R6 - Go Team GB!
 I like it 
  November 19, 2012
Ahh, it's a real shame Mark didn't post an entry even though I doubt he'd have stood a chance against this. Clown noir? Brilliant. Your story-telling is as top-notch as ever and there's lots of details to love: the venetian blind, the clown cars, the poison bottle, the chain of monkeys to name but a few. Go MOC Olympics team GB!
 I like it 
  November 19, 2012
I should be working for half an hour already, but I couldn't resist. I had to read your story and it was worth every minute. Combining the most colourful world possible with the most monochromatic world is pure genius. I presume your opponent wouldn't have had a chance - you are a born storyteller and you can build in more than one category - but it is a bit sad how this all went. Nevertheless, you gave us a whole bunch of creations with enjoyable details and building techniques, an idea that should be converted into a tv series and a very tasteful story. Thank you.
 I like it 
  November 19, 2012
Awesome
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  November 19, 2012
LMFAO brilliant Stu! Good luck getting into the next round.....oh wait....nvm! Lucky! I never get a pass!
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  November 19, 2012
...'Cause you're the Stu, and you're... Awesome. Dude, that was HILARIOUS (and very well built too)! I know it's not ideal circumstances but... welcome to round 6 and the final four! ~ Chris.
Delatron 3000
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Thoy Bradley
  November 18, 2012
Excellent Job Mr Delahay! If you hadn't mentioned that this wasn't finished - I would never have known. I can empathise with you about going through with no challenger, but not in the circumstances that caused it. You did a great build and I hope those who were anti the category so much learn a valid lesson through seeing what you have produced. Well done and GL in R6! ~Thoy
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  November 18, 2012
10 heads 100% A+ Amazing a lot of fun a great story eye candy details beyond measure loved the jealousy window! Clowns and their world - who'd have thunk?
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  November 18, 2012
Superb overall. I love the techniques that were used, such as incorporating Toy Story figs into it. The story flowed very well. Well done!
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  November 18, 2012
I looked, I laughed and I liked! :)
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  November 18, 2012
Good story. Really nice builds with good features like the chairs and blinds in the office. You also did a great job of creating a very colorful and plausible Clownville.
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  November 18, 2012
Excellent writing, and some seriously impressive builds! Congrats, Dude! The bearded lady cracked me up.
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  November 18, 2012
I love the technique for the blinds.
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  November 18, 2012
Fantastic work Stuart, I've been looking forward to this and you didn't disappoint. The builds are excellent, your use of colour is gutsy but perfect. I really like the office too, the P.I. shot was hilarious. Of course, the story is phenomenal. A very enjoyable way to spend a few minutes, I really like your take on the category. A pity about all that you mentioned in the fourth wall section, the next round should be less controversial.
 I like it 
  November 18, 2012
Excellent, Stu! Amazing to see how you executed this; this might be my favorite entry of this year's MO's! Good luck to you!
 
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