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LOM: Freebuild: Intrusion
Pretty much my first try on a medieval house. Yeah, it's not that great, particularly the roof, but at least it's something. :P So . . . READ.
About this creation


The day had been both wonderful and exhilerating. Diana wished she could get out more. It was a shame her only excuse was exercising the horse. Every day her parents seemed to be giving her more chores to do, more annoyances. She was getting tired of it.
Diana sighed as she passed a small house. Maybe things would get better.



That was when she felt it. A strong force seemed to be tugging at her very soul. And it came from that cottage. Diana didn't plan on ignoring it. She had to see what it was.
"Stay, Allie." She told her horse.



Diana crept up to the door, carefully sliding it open. Certainly it wouldn't hurt just to take a peek.



"This is what you're supposed to be protecting?" A young dark haired man asked.
"Yes." Replied the other, who had long, shaggy hair. He gestured to the strange staff in the center of the room. "And I need it returned to Mythron as soon as possible."
"Why?" Inquired an older man. "Why is it so important?"
"I probably wouldn't be allowed to tell you if I knew. Because, honestly, I don't know."



The jewel crowning the staff began to glow.
"Look at that!" Shouted the old man.
"What's happening?!" The shaggy haired man shrieked.



Diana didn't even have time to scream. The door swung open and the rod smacked straight into her hand. Energy seemed to flow through her veins when she touched it. She'd never felt such sensations . . . such power. . . .



Diana stumbled away from the door, just as the dark haired man came charging out.
"GET THE STAFF!" Someone screamed from inside.
"CAZZMIR, WAIT!" The old man called.



Instinct took over. Diana flung the stick forward, zapping him backward with the glaring gem. Allie rose up on her hind legs and whinnied in protest.



Diana's legs were trembling. That assault had cost her energy . . . but why?
The man—Cazzmir—as the older one had called him, rubbed his head and groaned. Cazzmir? But . . . that was the famous one that everyone in Invadir knew. The one who stole a sapphire from Meids. This was his home?
"Why . . . I haven't seen such a sorceress since—since I can't even remember." The older one, who seemed to be his father murmured.
"More like a witch." Cazzmir grumbled.
"WHO CARES?!" Shouted the other man. "I WANT MY STAFF BACK!"
"Hush Frazer. What is your name, child?" Asked the father.



"D—Diana. Diana Zappora." She put her arm around her horse's muzzle for comfort.
"Zappora?!" Exclaimed the old man. "Why, your family doesn't live too far from here. I know your parents."



Cazzmir stood and approached her. "Well, Diana. . . ." He began. "I think you have something that isn't yours. And you need to return it."
She nearly screamed no. She couldn't bear to have it part with her. It seemed more than some magical item. It was . . . linked with her somehow. But she didn't know why. Perhaps it was best to find out its importance some other time.



Reluctantly, Diana handed it over. As soon as it left her hand, the pink gleam died, but Cazzmir didn't notice.
"Well, since you obviously have a talent in—erm—attacking people . . . I think we could use you. What do you say to a journey outside of Invadir? Or even farther . . . outside Enalica?"
Diana's head spun. Leave Invadir? Leave Enalica? Why . . . that was what she'd been fantasizing about ever since she was a little girl!
"YES, YES!" SHe could've hugged him if she hadn't just clubbed him a few seconds before.
His face showed the slightest hint of humor. "Then we're even."



Bonus pics.



The path.



Right wall. I'm really impressed with the texture. Though it probably doesn't save the build. >.>



Left wall.



And the door. I figured dark tan masonry would look pretty good. And I guess Gilbert Despathens used the masonry for door technique first. At least that's where I first saw it. :P



The roof, which I hate. Ugh, I'm positive it's supposed to be behind the sides. >.>



Indoors.

Ok, so the build needs work. But it's a nice way to introduce magic into the story. ;) You'll be seeing some shortly. More to come soon! And thanks for reading!



Comments

 I like it 
  March 3, 2014
Nice work, though the front looks bare..
 I like it 
  February 22, 2014
My only real criticism is the door. It seems kind of... made of stone. :P I really love the stone walls though, they are absolutely great.
  February 20, 2014
Yeah, they're definitely an odd choice. I know I've seen Mr. Xenomurphy use that technique before, for one.
 I made it 
  February 20, 2014
Quoting Thomas of Tortuga The texturing on the lower wall is superb, and the bookshelf is pleasingly cluttered. Also, the story is excellent, and I'd be amiss to omit the curved dress design :)
Thanks, Thomas! Yes, I still love the texture, too. ;D And I mainly use that curved dress design(I'm sure you're aware it isn't mine to begin with) because I honestly hate those slope dress bricks LEGO sets give to female minifigs. Ugh, they're too tall . . . and they just look weird. :P
 I made it 
  February 20, 2014
Quoting Kai Bernstein ...let me explain. The only reason I erupted in my last comment is because I've seen so many sparse paths and too many people beginning to use square tiles, I was bound to break sometime. This just happened to be the moc my dam broke over. I assure you it's nothing personal. :P
Ha, kinda like me with exposed studs on flat roofs. So many people leave it that way it gets annoying. >.> But I really added them because I've already used the round grey tiles, and wanted to use some dark grey, too. I don't think they're all that great, either. And if you don't like them, I'll stop using them. ;) Thanks again, Kai!
 I like it 
  February 20, 2014
The texturing on the lower wall is superb, and the bookshelf is pleasingly cluttered. Also, the story is excellent, and I'd be amiss to omit the curved dress design :)
 I made it 
  February 20, 2014
Quoting Kai Bernstein Pretty nice, though I have just a few nitpicks I hope you don't mind me sharing. :P I won't mention the roof, as you already have, and so skip straight to the path. The landscaping, particularly the transition from grass to path, is very good; I like the use of the hinge plate. It's the path itself that bothers me; it feels too bare, too spread out. I've seen this on others' mocs as well, and have always thought dense paths with lots of piece variety look best. The next thing is minor but a pet peeve of mine. I've told Halhi, I've told Alex, I've told Jacob - square 1x1 tiles do not look good as pebbles, at least not on their own. :P Better to use plates, be they square or round. And last (and possibly least) I think the masonry bricks as the door only looks good when one just side of the door is seen: the side with just lines, no brick pattern. Like on the inside. :P Now that I've got all that out of the way... fantastic texturing! I love that stonework. The inside is pretty good as well, as is the landscaping (as mentioned before). The story's also pretty good; I'm definitely interested to see the next chapter!
Yeah, I'm not too particular on paths. And the main reason I didn't load it with different piece varieties is because I had the horse. >.> I mean, those flipped over round plates . . . whatever they're called . . . were annoying enough, and I needed space to connect the horse. :P And yeah, I got the same reaction from the masonry door, though I was thinking: 'Eh, it's not that bad.' But anyway, thanks for your opinions and critiques!
  February 20, 2014
...let me explain. The only reason I erupted in my last comment is because I've seen so many sparse paths and too many people beginning to use square tiles, I was bound to break sometime. This just happened to be the moc my dam broke over. I assure you it's nothing personal. :P
 I like it 
  February 20, 2014
Pretty nice, though I have just a few nitpicks I hope you don't mind me sharing. :P I won't mention the roof, as you already have, and so skip straight to the path. The landscaping, particularly the transition from grass to path, is very good; I like the use of the hinge plate. It's the path itself that bothers me; it feels too bare, too spread out. I've seen this on others' mocs as well, and have always thought dense paths with lots of piece variety look best. The next thing is minor but a pet peeve of mine. I've told Halhi, I've told Alex, I've told Jacob - square 1x1 tiles do not look good as pebbles, at least not on their own. :P Better to use plates, be they square or round. And last (and possibly least) I think the masonry bricks as the door only looks good when one just side of the door is seen: the side with just lines, no brick pattern. Like on the inside. :P Now that I've got all that out of the way... fantastic texturing! I love that stonework. The inside is pretty good as well, as is the landscaping (as mentioned before). The story's also pretty good; I'm definitely interested to see the next chapter!
 I made it 
  February 18, 2014
Quoting Alex Rode I like the lower house texture, that style is great. Nice build!
Yeah, thanks!
 I made it 
  February 18, 2014
Quoting A M Nice work on the masonry!
Thanks. Gotta love dem bricks. ;)
 I like it 
  February 18, 2014
I like the lower house texture, that style is great. Nice build!
 I like it 
  February 18, 2014
Nice work on the masonry!
 I made it 
  February 18, 2014
Quoting Nathan Pownell Nice job! I like the texturing on the wall, and I really don' think the roof is that bad. (Compared to some others……)
Oh, ok then. Thanks for proving me wrong. :P
 I made it 
  February 18, 2014
Quoting Freeling ++ Cool effects. Nice interior.
Thanks, I like the effects, too. ;D
 I made it 
  February 18, 2014
Quoting Mister Lego ~ Nice job! I like the bookcase and the textures on the house.
I didn't even try on the bookcase. It's just a small detail I added later. :P Thanks!
 I made it 
  February 18, 2014
Quoting Jony Prah Great job!
Thanks!
 I made it 
  February 18, 2014
Quoting Brick Mood That's awesome! I love it!
I know. ;P Thanks man!
 I like it 
  February 18, 2014
Nice job! I like the texturing on the wall, and I really don' think the roof is that bad. (Compared to some others……)
 I like it 
  February 18, 2014
Cool effects. Nice interior.
 I like it 
  February 18, 2014
Nice job! I like the bookcase and the textures on the house.
 I like it 
  February 18, 2014
Great job!
 I like it 
  February 18, 2014
That's awesome! I love it!
 
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