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LOM May UC: UNREST ON THE WALLS
My first-ever, more-than-slightly-rushed, UC for the month of May.
About this creation
Oh, dear. I just got back my laptop, which is now back to full health from battery issues (that is why I was gone for part for of the week) and I don’t have much time to post, so I’ll make this as short as possible. So, yes, I’m actually entering the UC (*gasp*), although I know I don’t really stand half of a chance in it.

Neither can I say that this is one of my best builds, but, eh, I tried within the time that I had (which actually wasn’t that much, especially considering how many times I accidentally broke it before I locked most of it down). I always build the first draft, and then tweak parts of it over the next week or so (really, it normally looks nothing like the original), but since this was rushed… this is kind of the first draft :P…Ah, well, I’ll do better in the future.

Anyways, on to the short story-- which now has pictures. Well… it’s short by my standards :P. But I hope, as always, that it will be enjoyable to the readers.
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LOM, May UC 034

Ranger Julie L.E.E.P. slowly strode along the outward wall of Reedus, her bow relaxed at her side, the mild, warm wind blowing strands of her dark, chocolate-colored hair across her face. It had been only a few days since she, Will, and Duel had arrived in Reedus, and had been assigned by the Ranger Council to different jobs. Julie’s job was to keep watch on part of the western section of the great stone wall, Will was placed in charge of the couple dozen rangers and soldiers (including Julie) guarding the north-eastern wall, and Bain was chosen to be one of the head patrollers/scouts.

Although today was a breezy, lazy, late spring day, no one in Reedus was relaxed. In fact, the entire time Julie had been there, it was as if the city was waiting, on the edge of a chasm, but whether the Black Lotus or Mythron was to make the first step onto the bridge, no one knew.

The feeling of not knowing what was to happen, that and the suspense tightly woven into the air, were dreadful. And to Julie, who had been troubled ever since she had found out more about her past [see the latest chapter-JLP], it was worse than dreadful. The feeling sat in her stomach like a hard stone, and made her tongue dry as she stood under the blazing sun, just waiting, and watching. Watching as a mason started to unload his cart to repair the hole in the wall under her with the stones he had hewn that very morning.

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“Don’t you wish that something would happen already?” Ranger Will remarked conversationally at her shoulder, startling Julie out of her thoughts, as she whirled around to face him.

Will held up his left hand (his sword was in his right), and stepped back, realizing he had startled her yet again. “Oh, I’m sorry about that.”

“It’s alright, Wi-- Captain, you just… startled me, that’s all.”

“You seemed deep in thought. Is there anything that is bothering you? Anyone?” Will asked, slightly anxious. He did, after all, ask her to join them here, and if she had been harassed by anyone, that would be his fault. Will had already realized that, while on the outside, Mythron was noble, and equal gender-wise, but on the inside, the story was often much different.

“Ah, no, I was just thinking. I’ve had a lot on my mind lately,” Julie said, slightly turning away from him, watching the mason as he started to chip away at the rough edges of the hole.

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Will followed her eyes. “That fellow is quite fast, you know? He has already filled up three holes, and I daresay it isn’t even noon yet.”

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Glad for a change in topic, Julie smiled. “Well, let’s just hope that the Lotus don’t break down the wall again as fast as he is re-building it right now. The fact that Reedus’ walls have holes in them itself is pretty depressing. I suppose that the High King never thought that anyone would ever dare to attack the capital.”

“Well, he was wrong, wasn’t he,” Will chuckled, but his eyes strayed to Julie. Unslept nights and many worries were written all across her face in red marker. Something was wrong. Maybe it was just the suspense, but it was probably something else, too, he thought. “Isn’t the waiting terrible?”

“Hm,” Julie replied. “Well, it is pretty bad, I suppose, and that on top of...” she trailed off. “It feels like a constricting noose. I wish that Mythron would do something already. I don’t know how the soldiers here cope. I’ve only been here three days today, and I already feel as if I’m about to burst.”

“Well, Julie, you may have your wish soon. The Ranger Council says that scouts have reported that the Black Lotus is closing in. We shall probably have a bloody battle, although only God knows when it will be. But we will not strike before they do, at least.”

“Are you going to be in it?” Julie asked, gesturing to the sword.

“Ah, I don’t know yet,” Will responded, following her glance to the sword. “Oh, you are wondering why… The reason I have a sword is because my father was a knight of the order. I’m quite clumsy with knives, and strikers, so I’ve kept this sword that was given to me from him. Most people don’t think that rangers can use a sword that well, and I’ve been able to use that misconception to my advantage often.”

Julie nodded. “Like Duel and his assassin knives.” She had learned a lot about Duel’s method of fighting during their travel together to Reedus.

“Well, yes. Anyway, if there is anything, that I could do to help, Julie, about anything, I would really like to know. If you have any concerns about anything…” he trailed off.

Julie smiled dryly at him. “Is that an order, Will, Sir, about anything?”

Then silence.

“No, a request.”

More silence.

“Well, I wish you the best. Try not to fall asleep on watch, will you?”

“I won’t, Sir,” Julie said, a small, sad smile twisting the edges of her mouth up ever-so-slightly.

Will nodded, yet not satisfied, and walked off. There was nothing left to say.

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Behind them, a couple feet away, a solider in Mythronian garb nodded, satisfied. “So,” he thought. “Ze Captain was right. ‘Zay aren’t planning ‘do do anyzing before we do.”

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The soldier quickly flicked his arm, and a throwing knife sailed in the wind towards Will, who was walking off. It hit him right above his belt.

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“Agh!” Will groaned as he staggered back a few steps, and then collapsed and fell deep into the warm, black abyss of unconsciousness.

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As Julie and the other guards ran to help Will, the “soldier” vaulted over the edge of the wall, shimmed down the wall, and jumped the last few feet, landing on the horse of the mason.


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In a flash, he had cut the ropes attaching the horse to the cart, and galloped off.

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He was almost into the forest (and into almost certain safety) when a well-aimed arrow sunk into his thigh. “AGH!” he yelled, falling off his stolen horse, which neighed defiantly and ran home.

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The spy looked back. The ranger girl, the cursed one who had escaped from his former captain’s clutches was now running to the edge of the wall in hot pursuit.

The spy ripped the arrow out of his thigh, ignoring the red mist that started to creep about his eyes, and plunged wildly into the forest.

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And of course, Julie followed.

…TO BE CONTINUED…

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Hm, what to say. The next parts are all pictures and writings about this highly-detailed build, so for those who have come this far, or if you actually want to see the build :P, you may as well skim it as you please.

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Overview

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A few overviewing pictures. Kind of an odd size, IMO (16x48, methinks). I would have made it a 36x36, with a cliff of rockwork (that was my original plan), but since I didn’t have the time, I made it smaller.

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The wall. At first, I made the wall with a ton of greebles and texturing-- and then I realized I was making the walls of Reedus, and it should probably look a little nicer. So, I rebuilt it with some texturing and detailing, but much less. Quite frankly, I think the greebly kind was better, but I didn’t have time to change it back. Notice that neither angles are parallel or at a 90 degree angle to the ground-- the angle plates are at less than 90 degrees, which made it awfully hard to stabilize it them (the wall fell down a few times before I did) and also add smooth tiles for the minifigures to walk on. Also, I had to make the grey indention area parallel to the wall, which made it even harder to stabilize. I used foliage to cover up where the walls hit the studs and jumper plates which attached to the ground.

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Just one of the structures holding up the wall. This is the first time I’ve ever used a BURP and a LURP.

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The path. I consider this my best work so far-- more “melting” into the ground, and I also used a few jumper plates to make a half-stud offset several times which really help the overall look, I think. Although now I’m building another path that is much better than this (more melting and a new technique that I think is turning out nicely), I’m still happy with how this turned out, believe it or not :P.

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The cart. I used a similar design from my chapter one build, but I expanded it and modified several pieces. In that build, Halhi suggested I try using string to attach the cart to the horse, and Thomas suggested that I make it a few plates lower, and, to implement those two suggestions was a heck of a challenge, although I’m glad that I did. The first problem I ran into was securely attaching the string to both the horse and the cart-- and then, the cart insisted on falling over forward, or backwards. I finally shortened the string so that the cart was pushing against the horse’s tail ever so slightly, which allowed it to stand up straight. Next, I lessened the plates attaching the wheels to the body, to allow for a lower cart. This made the cart fall apart, and made the string to somehow loosen its knot, so I had to redo step one here. Finally, I locked it together (once I got it back together) with a long plate underneath the cart and I think the outcome is much improved from my previous one.

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The tree. I found out how to add more “leaves” to thicken the overall appearance with the bamboo plants with the same amount of leaf pieces from my previous build. Other than that, this is similar to my previous one, with the exception that it is 4 studs smaller (which makes it hard to round) and that I finished the foliage. Also, I didn’t use Mark of Falworth’s tree clip technique here all the time, as I added in a technique of my own, using the 1x1x3 round things with the hollow in the top, brown sticks, and another piece which I don’t know the name of. I also got this cool idea for a bamboo-leaf tree while building this (it will be better than it sounds :P), and I plan on using it in the future to allow me to use minimal leave pieces-- so hopefully I’ll be able to make more than one tree in a scene in this style even before my next order comes in.

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The stream, with foliage around it. Now, I admit, the water looks pretty sad here, and is probably the weakest part of this build, but it looks much better in real life, I promise. The foliage isn’t that good, either, but this is a hastily rebuilt version of my previous foliage (because SOMEONE stepped on it *cough*my younger brother*cough*), so I wasn’t able to spend more than 15 minutes on it. I would appreciate suggestions on water techniques if you could spare a moment to comment :).

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The rockwork. I like the angle I was able to create with this SNOTted rockwork. My only complaint is that I couldn’t make it bigger than it is. Oh, well, in my next build I will probably include more rockwork, and I’ll make that big-ish.

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All is now done and said except that I would appreciate if you could COMMENT and RATE. I would really appreciate any and every in-depth to the smallest, most nit-picky suggestion that you might have. So please don’t hesitate to yell at me about parts of this MOC.

Cheers, and thanks for reading!

-Julia LeeP

P.S. If you read the previous chapter, you should know what the name of the spy is, and who his previous captain was. I’m OBVIOUSLY NOT hinting that this might be significant to the story :P.



Comments

 I made it 
  July 28, 2014
Quoting Kai Bernstein Great work! I'm really liking the story. There's not much to say on the build - Halhi said it all - so I'll just emphasize the point of grill bricks as texturing. They really do not belong when used in that fashion. But if you don't have other, better masonry bricks, then try more SNOTED 1x2 tiles. Overall, though, and as I said - great work!
Thanks, Kai! I agree that the grill bricks really don't fit in, but, since, for some reason or another, most of my grey 1x2 bricks are grill bricks, I didn't have any masonry bricks then but three, and I all the grey headlights I had were eight, give or take a few, I really didn't have much of an option here, if you see what I mean, other than greebling, which I didn't have the pieces to do here either... when I say I have a small collection, believe me, it is small :P Anyways though, as always, thank you for taking the time to comment and critique!
 I like it 
  July 27, 2014
Great work! I'm really liking the story. There's not much to say on the build - Halhi said it all - so I'll just emphasize the point of grill bricks as texturing. They really do not belong when used in that fashion. But if you don't have other, better masonry bricks, then try more SNOTED 1x2 tiles. Overall, though, and as I said - great work!
 I made it 
  June 14, 2014
Quoting Graham Gidman Great work! Now, here's a little critique, if you don't mind. :) The tower is a bit awkward-looking overall, but that can't really be help given the creation size, and I agree with Halhi about the grill bricks; unless you're going with an extremely textured wall, those bricks don't work very well. The landscaping is fantastic, especially that tree, and the only thing I would mention in that area of the build is the pathway, which, while very good, is kind of chaotic-looking with all of the different colors and textures. :)
Thanks for the comment, Graham! About the grill bricks, I totally agree with you, but I was quite limited on grey 1x2 bricks of any texture then (they were being used in a different project, one for school, and of course school comes first), so I didn't have much of a choice here. Same goes for the path, I agree with your critique, but I simply didn't have the pieces needed available to cut it down to two colors, not to mentian that the path was quite rushed. But, thanks a lot for your comment, and even more for your critique! It is much appreciated.
 I like it 
  June 12, 2014
Great work! Now, here's a little critique, if you don't mind. :) The tower is a bit awkward-looking overall, but that can't really be help given the creation size, and I agree with Halhi about the grill bricks; unless you're going with an extremely textured wall, those bricks don't work very well. The landscaping is fantastic, especially that tree, and the only thing I would mention in that area of the build is the pathway, which, while very good, is kind of chaotic-looking with all of the different colors and textures. :)
 I made it 
  June 5, 2014
Quoting M2com McKinney Excellent wall work! I like the destroyed textures, nicely done! Thanks for adding me as one of your favorite builds, I really appreciate it!
Thanks! Although I hope I didn't add you as one of my favorite builds... you ARE a person, right? ;)
 I like it 
  June 3, 2014
Excellent wall work! I like the destroyed textures, nicely done! Thanks for adding me as one of your favorite builds, I really appreciate it!
 I made it 
  June 3, 2014
Quoting The Object of Legend The angled walls are fascinating, and you have a wonderful forest scene. I enjoyed the story too, excellent work!
Thanks, OoL!
 I made it 
  June 3, 2014
Quoting Halhi 141 Thanks for waiting, I forgot about this. Anyway, the wall has a lot of visual appeal, but try replacing the grill bricks with something else, maybe tiles on headlight bricks, or more masonry bricks (if you have them). Also, adding in small amounts of other colors on the wall (generally dark tan, sand green - if you have it - and/or dark grey look best). At the hinge, it might look better if the gap is filled in. Maybe put in a vertical row of cheese slopes? Then again, the hinge bricks would prevent that... Perhaps if you took out the hinge bricks and hinged it in a different way, that would allow for the cheese slopes to go in. Finally, I agree that a more dilapidated look would probably look better. The path looks pretty nice, but not as good as your last one - I think less use of brown, as well as taking out the half stud offsets, would look better. The foliage looks amazing overall. Maybe putting it everywhere (covering the plain dark green areas) would look better, but otherwise it's fantastic. The tree is pretty good. The foliage seems slightly chaotic though - having just one shade of green and taking out the bamboo leaves might look better - after all, it's a bit unrealistic for a tree to have two different shapes/styles of leaves! Finally, the cart looks great overall - not much to say here. Overall, this is another stellar build - Great job!
Thank you so much for your comment, Halhi-- your comments are the best bribes that you can give, IMO :P.
 I made it 
  June 3, 2014
Quoting White Hawk Great job! Your writing style is amazing and your builds keep getting better and better.
Thanks!
 I like it 
  June 3, 2014
The angled walls are fascinating, and you have a wonderful forest scene. I enjoyed the story too, excellent work!
  June 2, 2014
Thanks for waiting, I forgot about this. Anyway, the wall has a lot of visual appeal, but try replacing the grill bricks with something else, maybe tiles on headlight bricks, or more masonry bricks (if you have them). Also, adding in small amounts of other colors on the wall (generally dark tan, sand green - if you have it - and/or dark grey look best). At the hinge, it might look better if the gap is filled in. Maybe put in a vertical row of cheese slopes? Then again, the hinge bricks would prevent that... Perhaps if you took out the hinge bricks and hinged it in a different way, that would allow for the cheese slopes to go in. Finally, I agree that a more dilapidated look would probably look better. The path looks pretty nice, but not as good as your last one - I think less use of brown, as well as taking out the half stud offsets, would look better. The foliage looks amazing overall. Maybe putting it everywhere (covering the plain dark green areas) would look better, but otherwise it's fantastic. The tree is pretty good. The foliage seems slightly chaotic though - having just one shade of green and taking out the bamboo leaves might look better - after all, it's a bit unrealistic for a tree to have two different shapes/styles of leaves! Finally, the cart looks great overall - not much to say here. Overall, this is another stellar build - Great job!
 I like it 
  June 2, 2014
Great job! Your writing style is amazing and your builds keep getting better and better.
 I made it 
  June 1, 2014
Quoting Ian ... Great Job! I'm off to camp, but I'll make a better comment on my return.
Thanks Ian! Btw, I made a long comment on your latest build the day it was posted(that day I was bored :P), but it still hasn't gotten through moderation...
 I made it 
  June 1, 2014
Quoting Thomas of Tortuga @Julia: About the accent, I think it's apparent when he murders a Mythronian with a dagger that he's not what he seems :P It's your story, though, of course.
Ah, no, not that he is a bad guy, but exactly who he is name-wise and who his captain was. That will prove to be important to the story in the future... If this was a real story, I would have taken out the accent, and added in a scar or something likewise, in my revisions, but, sadly enough, I only have a rough draft of my plotlines right now, and I didn't think until this build that I would be using him again.
 I like it 
  June 1, 2014
@Julia: About the accent, I think it's apparent when he murders a Mythronian with a dagger that he's not what he seems :P It's your story, though, of course.
 I like it 
  June 1, 2014
Great Job! I'm off to camp, but I'll make a better comment on my return.
 I made it 
  June 1, 2014
Quoting cyberfrank 2010 pretty cool scene, especially the tree!
Thanks!
 I made it 
  June 1, 2014
Quoting Thomas of Tortuga @Asad: You see what I mean, Julia, about some people not liking to read stories? :P
Quoting the Story
The formatting on this is much more fun to read, and your writing is great as always. I love the "chocolate-brown hair" simile- it perfectly describes that dark brown color. Have you ever written a novel, or anything like that, or do you mostly write short stories? I'd love to read anything else you've published online. When you mentioned how quickly the mason was working, I thought he was going to be the villain. The guard attacking, meanwhile, was almost completely unexpected. I think you should take out his cartoon German accent. At best, it's distracting from the story, and it somewhat takes away the shock when he strikes.
Quoting the Walls
The angle in the walls looks really nice, and sets this wall apart from the dozens of renditions of Reedus in the past. To add onto what Mr. Cab said about the wall colorings, real walls would usually have an outer shell of expensive finished stone, and an inner core of scrap rocks and earth. The dark grey color inside, therefore, would work. However, the grey would look a lot better if it was textured/greebled, rather than having the same level of detail as the wall. Also, you mentioned that the wall was more textured. From experience, I can say that, even if it isn't realistic at all for a mighty city, the more texture you add the better.
Quoting the Path
The jumper studs on the path look terrific. I should really try that technique out for paths. I think the cart is much improved from last time. To me, though, I think the thread looks too thin for a harness. If you can do it without getting them tangled or frayed, maybe you should try it with two threads on each side, perhaps wound together. Or you could just use Lego poles- after all, a minifig-scale model is always going to be slightly exaggerated.
Quoting the Landscaping
The tree looks amazing- all the random leaves shoved into it look so true to life, and the shaping is flawless. I think the foliage looks just fine with all the other details around it. The water looks like a good technique for small streams, but the problem is that the trans plates are on top of a tan plate. If you add a different color plate underneath, such as white or blue, I think it would look better (even if, again, it isn't realistic for a stream of that size.)
Thanks for the comment, Thomas! First the story: I'll admit that it was quite butchered, as I wrote it up under pressure in 15 minutes :P. Meh, but I'm glad you like my writing. To be honest, I've written up a novel that was about 60ish pages long for the NaNo WriMo, a writing competition, but since I had to write the entire thing in less than a month, not to mention editing, so by the end it was quite sickening for me to read, although others did like it, and it won in the class that I was shadowing-- but quite frankly, that's not saying much. About the dude and his cartoon German accent: I wouldn't have used it, but that is the only thing that really reveals who he is without saying it explicitly. I do agree though that the entire thing could use some reworking and editing though, and I hope to be able to do that for future builds. Hmm, the walls... I never thought about that, but I suppose it would make sense. About the path, thanks, that was a last minute add-on, and since I'd been thinking about making a half-stud offset, I decided why not to try it out here (although I actually think the path was a little overdone). About the cart, that was exactly what I was thinking! The problem was, I couldn't stick more than one string through the holes and tie them with such poor lighting that I have now and will have until a parent finally gets to repairing/replacing my lamp. And I'm glad you like the tree-- the leaves kept on falling out when I would move the characters for photos, and I wasn't sure whether I put them back in right, but I guess I must have ;). About the stream: I did try blue clear plates underneath, but that made it look like it was an ocean or something, so I switched back to tan. However, I'll keep that in mind, as I've been wanting to experiment with water for a long time. Thank you so much for your comment and critiques! (I just realized that I should have probably quoted your sections... uh, sorry, I'm too lazy to add them in now :P.)
 I like it 
  June 1, 2014
pretty cool scene, especially the tree!
 I like it 
  May 31, 2014
@Asad: You see what I mean, Julia, about some people not liking to read stories? :P
Quoting the Story
The formatting on this is much more fun to read, and your writing is great as always. I love the "chocolate-brown hair" simile- it perfectly describes that dark brown color. Have you ever written a novel, or anything like that, or do you mostly write short stories? I'd love to read anything else you've published online. When you mentioned how quickly the mason was working, I thought he was going to be the villain. The guard attacking, meanwhile, was almost completely unexpected. I think you should take out his cartoon German accent. At best, it's distracting from the story, and it somewhat takes away the shock when he strikes.
Quoting the Walls
The angle in the walls looks really nice, and sets this wall apart from the dozens of renditions of Reedus in the past. To add onto what Mr. Cab said about the wall colorings, real walls would usually have an outer shell of expensive finished stone, and an inner core of scrap rocks and earth. The dark grey color inside, therefore, would work. However, the grey would look a lot better if it was textured/greebled, rather than having the same level of detail as the wall. Also, you mentioned that the wall was more textured. From experience, I can say that, even if it isn't realistic at all for a mighty city, the more texture you add the better.
Quoting the Path
The jumper studs on the path look terrific. I should really try that technique out for paths. I think the cart is much improved from last time. To me, though, I think the thread looks too thin for a harness. If you can do it without getting them tangled or frayed, maybe you should try it with two threads on each side, perhaps wound together. Or you could just use Lego poles- after all, a minifig-scale model is always going to be slightly exaggerated.
Quoting the Landscaping
The tree looks amazing- all the random leaves shoved into it look so true to life, and the shaping is flawless. I think the foliage looks just fine with all the other details around it. The water looks like a good technique for small streams, but the problem is that the trans plates are on top of a tan plate. If you add a different color plate underneath, such as white or blue, I think it would look better (even if, again, it isn't realistic for a stream of that size.)
 I made it 
  May 31, 2014
Quoting Halhi 141 I'll leave a proper comment later, but this is a great build. I think I might like your last path a bit better, but overall this is fantastic.
Thanks, Halhi! Now that I've taken a step back, I actually agree with you on the path-- however, I would say that this path is a little more advanced technique-wise. I'm waiting with eager anticipation for your critiques ;).
 I made it 
  May 31, 2014
Quoting Andrew the Jedi Ninja Nice!
Thanks!
 I made it 
  May 31, 2014
Quoting Brickhead Inge Nice!
Thanks!
 I made it 
  May 31, 2014
Quoting Mr. Cab Wow, really nice job! First of all, the hole in the wall and the stone mason really add an extra layer to the story and the build; that was a great idea. Second, I think you actually did a pretty nice job on the river. I really get the feeling that it's just gurgling along (I don't know if you say that in English, but it's an expression you use in German, and I would say it is definitely a good thing for a build of any kind). The tree may need a little refining, such as making it all one color, but the bamboo pieces make it visually interesting and the shape is well done. I have only two criticisms: My first criticism is actually the path. The texture you created works wonderfully, but when people walk on paths, they kick away the dirt, so paths usually tend to be a bit lower than the surrounding ground. Just a one-plate step from the path up to the landscaping would be enough. Second, the hole in the wall. The dark gray beneath the light gray seems a bit unrealistic, I think the hole would most likely just be light grey all the way through, or maybe light grey with a few dark grey pieces, or even mostly dark grey with a few light grey pieces, but entirely dark grey just seems unnatural. ;) Otherwise, nice work on this one!
Thanks! About the path, I totally agree with you... this was a rushed build (the path being a last-second add-on before I took photos by the light of my ipod :P), and I was mostly focusing on the half-stud offsets instead of the general look. My bad. About the tree... hmm, you really think it would look better all one color? My thoughts on the wall are that since Reedus is oldish, the front layer of the wall would be lighter from the sun, but maybe some blending might have looked better. Thanks for your comment, and even more for your critique! I really appreciate it.
 I like it 
  May 31, 2014
Wow, really nice job! First of all, the hole in the wall and the stone mason really add an extra layer to the story and the build; that was a great idea. Second, I think you actually did a pretty nice job on the river. I really get the feeling that it's just gurgling along (I don't know if you say that in English, but it's an expression you use in German, and I would say it is definitely a good thing for a build of any kind). The tree may need a little refining, such as making it all one color, but the bamboo pieces make it visually interesting and the shape is well done. I have only two criticisms: My first criticism is actually the path. The texture you created works wonderfully, but when people walk on paths, they kick away the dirt, so paths usually tend to be a bit lower than the surrounding ground. Just a one-plate step from the path up to the landscaping would be enough. Second, the hole in the wall. The dark gray beneath the light gray seems a bit unrealistic, I think the hole would most likely just be light grey all the way through, or maybe light grey with a few dark grey pieces, or even mostly dark grey with a few light grey pieces, but entirely dark grey just seems unnatural. ;) Otherwise, nice work on this one!
 I like it 
  May 31, 2014
Nice!
 I like it 
  May 31, 2014
Nice!
 I like it 
  May 31, 2014
I'll leave a proper comment later, but this is a great build. I think I might like your last path a bit better, but overall this is fantastic.
 I made it 
  May 31, 2014
Quoting Stephen Boe Wow, fantastic work on the wall shaping!
Funny you just posted that... I just finished breaking down the wall. :P Anyways, I'm glad you like it!
 I like it 
  May 31, 2014
Wow, fantastic work on the wall shaping!
 I made it 
  May 31, 2014
Quoting Joe McGill Awesome shaping on the tree! And as usual, you really went to town on your story.
Thanks!
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  May 31, 2014
Quoting Asad . Great build! The large chunks of text between pictures kind of makes me not want to read the story though....
Pff. At least this is a major improvement from my last build. :P Oh, and thanks for the comment!
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  May 31, 2014
Awesome shaping on the tree! And as usual, you really went to town on your story.
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  May 31, 2014
Great build! The large chunks of text between pictures kind of makes me not want to read the story though....
 
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