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LOM: June UC: Vengeance
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My company was one of the first to learn of Borin’s betrayal, only one hour after it happened. While most other parts of the army of the Black Lotus still lay asleep, chaos ensued at our campsite. Many of them were angry. Assassins, mages, warriors, simple soldiers. Some of them were so angry, they started to kill each other in blind acts of rage. I could have left the camp right then, disappeared from the confusion. But then, I saw a much better opportunity…
The Mage that had forced me to join the Black Lotus had decided to gather a few men and make his escape. He gathered the best fighters of the company, though making sure he was the only mage, and that included me. Together with eight others, I left the campsite before dawn broke. I never took part in the final battle for the capital, never was able to execute the plan I had made.

Three weeks later, we were running out of food. We had raided small farmsteads to keep us supplied, but the frequent raids were tiring, and did not often yield enough for nine people. I hunted, too, but even with that, the food wasn’t enough. It was brought up that we would have to attack something bigger, but the discussion went back and forth. If we attacked a small village, then word would probably get out, and then we would be looked for. But what finally swayed everybody was something that we all shared: a hatred for Mythron. The perfect opportunity presented itself in a small fort a few miles away from Rogath, on the border between Mythron and Nerogue. We observed the fort, and made a plan. But secretly, I noted that I would be able to perform the plan I myself had made for the battle of the capital after all…



From a hidden position, I looked over the fort. The attack would not happen until in a few hours, but I preferred being alone to being with the group of reminiscent Black Loti. I had disliked the Black Lotus from the very beginning. I disliked them even more after I was forced to join, especially the mage. And what I experienced in the camp… No, I heavily disliked them, even more than I disliked Mythronians. But they wouldn’t be a problem much longer.



Ten minutes before the attack would start, I made my way to the wall of the fort. There was a full moon, but the sky was cloudy. Good conditions for staying undetected, because the moonlight made it harder to see through the shadow. I made it to the wall without being seen, and now I was waiting for the attack to start.



A lone halidra walked down the path. He was the one in our group of Black Loti that I disliked least, as he was most like me: Skilled, cunning, calculating, and reclusive. I shook myself out of my thoughts.



“Who’s there?” the archer on the walkway called down the halidra.
He said nothing and kept walking.
“My crossbow is aimed at you. State your name and business!”
The halidra didn’t reply.
“Not stating your name and business when asked for it by any Mythronian soldier or official is a violation of Mythronian law. Tell me who you are and what you want or you will be fired at.”



I grinned and used the distraction to start climbing up the wall of the fort.



Two orc warriors, and orc archer and the mage appeared behind the halidra. The archer gave a small scream, and gasps and shouts were heard from the other guards on the wall.



I finished my ascent up the wall. The guard in my immediate vicinity heard nothing. Good. Then I checked what was happening below.



A knight on horseback had ridden out of the gate to face the Black Lotus warriors.



Now was the time to act out my plan. The group expected my support from the wall, but I had something else in mind. Quickly, I fired two arrows.



The first one hit the horse in the leg. It reared up, throwing off its rider.



The second arrow hit the orc archer. I hoped that everyone would think the Mythronian archer had shot at him, but even if not, it didn’t matter. The only person who could get me now was the mage, and he was preoccupied.



The guard nearest to me heard me when I shot the arrows. She ran towards me…



But another arrow quickly eliminated her.



Then I spotted one of the assassins behind the guard on the other side of the gate. He couldn’t be seen from below, so I knew he was a safe target.



One shot finished the job.



I took another look at the battle below. The knight that had been thrown off his horse had gotten up again, and an armored man with a chain mace had joined him. The horse was still reared up, but was about to be stabbed by an orc. I saw another opportunity.



I fired an arrow, hitting the orc. At the same time, the orc’s weapon embedded itself in the horse, and the horse fell on top of him.



Nobody ever knew it was an arrow that killed him.



“Ey, who’re you?” someone asked behind me.



Slowly, I turned around. A Nerogue with an axe had climbed up the ladder behind me. I scolded myself silently for not noticing him.



A cry of “For Mythron!” distracted me. A Mythronian soldier was charging at me. He had heard the Nerogue speak, and noticed me that way.



An arrow embedded itself in the soldier’s stomach.



I turned back to the Nerogue. “Why do you help Mythron?” I asked. “What have they ever done for you?”



I turned to the battle for a quick look. The armored man with the chain mace was being finished off by an orc, and the halidra was attacking the knight, but two more Nerogue soldiers had charged out the gate. A sandrin had also joined the battle. Then I spotted an assassin about to kill the knight. I decided that I needed the knight a little longer.



A quick arrow ensured that.



I turned back to the Nerogue still standing on the ladder.
“You help Mythron because they want justice and stand for good, don’t you.”
He nodded.
“But does Mythron really want those things?” I asked.
“Of course it–“ I interrupted his answer.
“You may think that. But there is a good reason that the Black Lotus was founded.”
He looked at me quizzically.
“Mythron is corrupt.” I continued. “Nobles, knights, lords. Many of them do what they do just for personal gain.”
I paused a little, and then continued.
“I know, the peasants and soldiers aren’t at fault. But in a sense, they are. They could revolt; try to change the way things are run. But they don’t. They are afraid. But you wouldn’t be afraid to risk your life for what you think is right. You are a Nerogue. I know, Nerogues try to help everybody. But maybe the way to help Mythron is to get rid of those selfish nobles, and those peasants and soldiers willing to be subject to such corrupt rulers.”
The Nerogue looked at me, surprised. Then his expression changed from surprise to anger.



He got up onto the wall and charged down it, heading for the Mythronian archer. It was my turn to be surprised. I hadn’t expected my speech to have such drastic effects.



The Nerogue killed first the archer…



And then the remaining soldier. After that, he charged on, looking for other Mythronians, presumably.



I looked at the battle again. One of the Nerogue soldiers had fallen, and the other was defending against the orc. The knight was still hard-pressed trying to hold of the halidra. I decided that I had to take action again.



I went for the sandrin first,



And afterwards proceeded to shoot down the orc.



With her opponent suddenly out of the way, the leftover Nerogue soldier assaulted the halidra from the side and his hand with her axe.



Satisfied, I jumped off of the wall.



I landed, and started walking away, but a voice behind me stopped me.
“Where do you think you are going?”



It was the mage.
“You may have killed all of them, but you can’t get away with it!” he raged.



Pain racked my body. I had felt pain like this before, inflicted by a Black Lotus Mage in Worsan, but this was worse. My body burned, my mind burned, everything burned with pain. I dropped my knife and my bow. The world turned white. It hurt so badly…



The mage stopped. I collapsed to the ground, panting.
“I know why you sabotaged us!” the mage shouted. “You work for the Organization! For the Coordinator! For the high Outlaw council.”
I nodded. “Your threat of pain was an opportunity. You forcing me to join the Black Lotus was to my benefit!” I said.



Again, pain shot through my whole being. But this time it was worse. My limbs shook; my very thoughts seemed to burn into ashes. My vision swirled, I could no longer tell what was up and down, left and right. I felt certain that if it went on, I would die.



Finally, the mage dropped me again. I lay there, not moving, thinking only of how I could prevent the pain from happening again.



“And this is only the beginning” the mage said.
I groped around on the ground, for a rock, something, anything.
“I will bring you pain again and again, until you break!”
My hand closed around something cold. Something hard. The hilt of my knife.
“I will–“



The mage never finished. My knife embedded itself in his stomach, and he collapsed forward, dead.



I walked over the mage and retrieved my knife. As I did so, I spoke to the dead man. “You can inflict pain. But you couldn’t do what you threatened me with the night I joined the Black Lotus, could you. You couldn’t induce pain beyond your own death.” But even as I said that, a slow throbbing started, all through my body. It wasn’t burning pain. It was bearable. But it hurt. And a feeling inside me told me that perhaps there had been a bit of truth in the mage’s claim.
Quickly, I headed off into the woods. My work against the Black Lotus was done.



Wounded and limping, one other figure left the battlefield…



Leaving behind only death…



...

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Extra pictures!



The whole castle. I quite like it, but I wish I would have had more tiles than plates, and more light gray than dark gray. As it is, it's the exact opposite, but that's just what I had, so I had to cope with it. On the other hand, notice how each area has a distinctive color combination: The landscape is light green and dark green, the castle light bley and dark bley, the path dark tan and dark bley, and the courtyard is light tan and dark tan. It makes the different elements of the build easy to differentiate, and I think it works pretty well. I wish I had put in more details though. That's the trouble when you try to make your largest diorama yet in a timeframe of two weeks...



The courtyard. It would look really plain and boring without the ladder and the shed, but as it is, I like it a lot.



Artistic shot!



An early version of the framework for the towers. I used the technique that Halhi first used for a rounded hull on one of his ships, utilizing wagon wheels, so credit goes to him.



The Mythronians. An improvement from the last time I included a bunch of them (this time without hand prints on the helmets and shields). I especially like the knight.



The Nerogues! They turned out nicely.



(Sorry for the blurry picture)
The Black Lotus!
From left to right:
The two assassins, the sandrin, the orc warrior, the orc archer...



...another orc warrior, the halidra and the mage.



The second orc warrior again, because I just want to say that you nearly never see Orcs with facial hair in LOM build. But why not? They should have beards and mustaches like other races, too. So there you go.



And of course, you can't show all the other characters without showing Qinon, too.



The surviving characters.

As mentioned before, I built this in two weeks. It is my largest diorama to date, measuring 38x38, 40x40 with base. Speaking of the base, I decided to go a bit fancy this time, and it looks OK. Overall, I like this build, but I could have put in a lot more details. I ran out of green plates in the end, and had to be careful to keep that part of the Moc out of the story. This is my first time making a round tower, and my first time making a (part of a) castle/fort. Most of the time building was spent on the infrastructure of the castle.

Well, I hope you liked it!



Comments

  June 23, 2014
I'm split on the green colors actually, which is why I didn't say anything - the dark green isn't all that bad and adds some much-needed diversity to the build, but dark green has such a different "feel" from all the other shades (more about that in my UC in a few days...) that it completely contrasts the regular green. I think sand green or bright green might look better. Alternately, you could make the whole landscape brown/dark green with a few bits of sand green and dark brown to break things up.
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  June 23, 2014
Quoting Caleb R. I think this is your best build to date. Incredible! I would love to see how you did the castle, especially the curved part. Again, fantastic job!
Thank you! How I did it is most visible in this picture (http://www.mocpages.com/image_zoom.php?mocid=390864&id=/user_images/105700/1403333016m), but the technique is probably better visible in this picture (http://www.mocpages.com/image_zoom.php?mocid=389121&id=/user_images/84200/1401075530m) by Halhi.
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  June 23, 2014
Quoting JP Creations The castle wall looks great!
Thanks! :D
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  June 23, 2014
Quoting ~ Brick @Kai Yes, I suppose is....n't. If you remember, I haven't always defeated my enemies:P But I suppose my story is predictible. I'll work on that.
It's something I think almost everybody has to work on...
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  June 23, 2014
Quoting Kai Bernstein Great work, Caballek! You have to do larger builds like those more often. And on the build, I'll start with that.
Quoting The Field
Firstly, I'm surprised Halhi didn't mention the dark green mixed with bright green - he doesn't like that. Sometimes I can see why, but in this case it looks much better than plain green would have. However, I do think a rock, tree, lookout post or something would have improved the landscaping, in addition to an occasional patch of foliage pieces. The path looks good color-wise, but I think the dark bley ought to be more condensed; either add more pieces or make them closer together, or both.
Quoting The Fortress
My first thoughts when I saw the fortress was that it didn't have a dominant color. Looks too crazy that way. It also didn't have enough tiles. But then I saw your explanation and, yes, the piececount problem is always a valid one, so you're exonerated. :P I do agree with Gilbert in that it should be higher, but I wouldn't have thought of it on my own. Overall, it looks great - good job with the angles. I have a special affinity for those, as seen in Holding the Bridge. :P
Quoting The Courtyard
I was surprised to see that the build had this, because it wasn't in the story at all. And it should be! You could have at least included a shot of a Mythron soldier falling backward over the wall and landing there, just to show people that it exists! It adds the necessary diversity and color change to make this build awesome. Where before we have only seen greens and greys and dark tan, here suddenly exists bright tan and wood structures (I love that thing over the weapons barrel). It adds contrast in a good way. Maybe you could have added the occasional bley (light and dark) or brown round plate, though.
Quoting The Story
Well now! I really like how this played out, and though there were a few problems I had with it -- the Nerogue being turned so easily, the Mage dying so easily, etc -- it was definitely satisfying. I thought maybe the Halidran would have a hand in the Mage's death and that he would team up with Qinon. Maybe that will still happen, as he lived. Remember not to make your character too powerful, though. While he's definitely more skilled than many of the Black Lotus, killing 11 at one time (and more after that) is a little much. In this case, of course, it's excusable because they were all distracted fighting the Mythronians. But I suggest a tad more difficulty in the future. :P
Quoting Overall
So yes, overall great build and story! Keep them coming in this quality!
I did think about putting a tree or some rocks on the field, for story purposes, but then I thought, who would have something like that so close to a fortress? It just makes it easy to sneak up to the wall. I didn't consider putting in smaller rocks, which is what I probably should have done. I hadn't even thought of the Halidra and Qinon teaming up, but I really like the idea. Mainly I just wanted the halidra to survive because he's a cool character. :P
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  June 22, 2014
I think this is your best build to date. Incredible! I would love to see how you did the castle, especially the curved part. Again, fantastic job!
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  June 21, 2014
The castle wall looks great!
  June 21, 2014
@Kai Yes, I suppose is....n't. If you remember, I haven't always defeated my enemies:P But I suppose my story is predictible. I'll work on that. And whenever you are ready I's ready for the breakdown on my UC:P
  June 21, 2014
Oh, and Brick -- you realize how funny (ironic) it is to see you criticizing a predictable story and klutzy enemies, right?
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  June 21, 2014
Great work, Caballek! You have to do larger builds like those more often. And on the build, I'll start with that.
Quoting The Field
Firstly, I'm surprised Halhi didn't mention the dark green mixed with bright green - he doesn't like that. Sometimes I can see why, but in this case it looks much better than plain green would have. However, I do think a rock, tree, lookout post or something would have improved the landscaping, in addition to an occasional patch of foliage pieces. The path looks good color-wise, but I think the dark bley ought to be more condensed; either add more pieces or make them closer together, or both.
Quoting The Fortress
My first thoughts when I saw the fortress was that it didn't have a dominant color. Looks too crazy that way. It also didn't have enough tiles. But then I saw your explanation and, yes, the piececount problem is always a valid one, so you're exonerated. :P I do agree with Gilbert in that it should be higher, but I wouldn't have thought of it on my own. Overall, it looks great - good job with the angles. I have a special affinity for those, as seen in Holding the Bridge. :P
Quoting The Courtyard
I was surprised to see that the build had this, because it wasn't in the story at all. And it should be! You could have at least included a shot of a Mythron soldier falling backward over the wall and landing there, just to show people that it exists! It adds the necessary diversity and color change to make this build awesome. Where before we have only seen greens and greys and dark tan, here suddenly exists bright tan and wood structures (I love that thing over the weapons barrel). It adds contrast in a good way. Maybe you could have added the occasional bley (light and dark) or brown round plate, though.
Quoting The Story
Well now! I really like how this played out, and though there were a few problems I had with it -- the Nerogue being turned so easily, the Mage dying so easily, etc -- it was definitely satisfying. I thought maybe the Halidran would have a hand in the Mage's death and that he would team up with Qinon. Maybe that will still happen, as he lived. Remember not to make your character too powerful, though. While he's definitely more skilled than many of the Black Lotus, killing 11 at one time (and more after that) is a little much. In this case, of course, it's excusable because they were all distracted fighting the Mythronians. But I suggest a tad more difficulty in the future. :P
Quoting Overall
So yes, overall great build and story! Keep them coming in this quality!
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  June 21, 2014
Quoting Graham Gidman Overall, a great build! The wall technique worked surprisingly well. I happen to like the plainly-styled landscaping, though, I agree with Brick on the fact that it could use some plants. :) Nice minifig combos, as well.
Thanks!
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  June 21, 2014
Quoting Halhi 141 @Gilbert: maybe that's strategic - the gate is so small that the soldiers can't easily get through it :P
It's not small so the soldiers can't get out, it's small so that the enemy can't get in! :P
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  June 21, 2014
Overall, a great build! The wall technique worked surprisingly well. I happen to like the plainly-styled landscaping, though, I agree with Brick on the fact that it could use some plants. :) Nice minifig combos, as well.
  June 21, 2014
@Gilbert: maybe that's strategic - the gate is so small that the soldiers can't easily get through it :P
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  June 21, 2014
Quoting Toa Infernum Nice! I also like the balance of the greys in the walls, and the mix of plates and tiles looks surprisingly good! Not a big fan of the use of orc torsos for Nerouges, or the round 2x2 plates in the path, I don't like how it leaves an axel hole. I also agree with Gilly, I think the MOC would have looked so much more impressive presented in micro scale, not minifig scale. I wish that you'd left out the reverse side all together, and used all those plates and tiles to make the wall bigger. Nice, innovative work though! :)
I thought the orc torsos looked good for the Nerogues... Even if not, I had to use them, because they are one of the few prints that I have three of a kind of. Except for clone torsos, of course, but that wouldn't work out. :P
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  June 21, 2014
Quoting Gilbert Despathens I don't mind the mix of two shades of grey, but I think the wall would have looked better if it were twice as tall and half as long, or even half again its present height and two thirds its present length. The curves are impressive, but a fort where a foot soldier has to duck to get through the main gate isn't very intimidating. Great work on shaping the wall, though. I'll have to try something with curves /and/ angles sometime.
The foot soldiers don't have to duck. Men on horseback to have to duck though. :P
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  June 21, 2014
Nice! I also like the balance of the greys in the walls, and the mix of plates and tiles looks surprisingly good! Not a big fan of the use of orc torsos for Nerouges, or the round 2x2 plates in the path, I don't like how it leaves an axel hole. I also agree with Gilly, I think the MOC would have looked so much more impressive presented in micro scale, not minifig scale. I wish that you'd left out the reverse side all together, and used all those plates and tiles to make the wall bigger. Nice, innovative work though! :)
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  June 21, 2014
I don't mind the mix of two shades of grey, but I think the wall would have looked better if it were twice as tall and half as long, or even half again its present height and two thirds its present length. The curves are impressive, but a fort where a foot soldier has to duck to get through the main gate isn't very intimidating. Great work on shaping the wall, though. I'll have to try something with curves /and/ angles sometime.
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  June 21, 2014
Quoting Joe McGill @Brick Gilbert, supreme ruler of LoM himself said that the Military of all factions consist of both genders equally.
I don't recall him actually saying that, but it sounds like something he would say. :P
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  June 21, 2014
Quoting Halhi 141 This is a great MOC with some excellent techniques, but unless I missed something, I believe that the story doesn't have any pictures showing the court-side of the wall? It might be better just to only build what you see in the story - the landscape of the court but not the wall - so you could save pieces for the front of the wall (and so you don't see the underside of the plate in the battlements). That being said, this is a very nice build, and while I don't entirely agree about the separation of colors (my UC WIP uses dark brown, brown, dark green, sand green, and dark grey for the landscape) it overall looks great. Good luck!
Good point. I probably could have saved some pieces... But I hate making Mocs that are incomplete when you look at them from behind. Plus, I didn't know how the story would work out until I had finished the moc. Looking forward to your UC entry as well.
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  June 21, 2014
@Brick Gilbert, supreme ruler of LoM himself said that the Military of all factions consist of both genders equally.
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  June 21, 2014
This is a great MOC with some excellent techniques, but unless I missed something, I believe that the story doesn't have any pictures showing the court-side of the wall? It might be better just to only build what you see in the story - the landscape of the court but not the wall - so you could save pieces for the front of the wall (and so you don't see the underside of the plate in the battlements). That being said, this is a very nice build, and while I don't entirely agree about the separation of colors (my UC WIP uses dark brown, brown, dark green, sand green, and dark grey for the landscape) it overall looks great. Good luck!
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  June 21, 2014
Quoting Stephan N Wow, the walls are made ​​very impressive.
Thanks!
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  June 21, 2014
Quoting ~ Brick You keep getting better and better! The walls were very good, (if a little too much grey) the landscape was about average, (I would have enjoyed seeing some plants on it) and the inner area of the castle was quite good! As far as the story goes, it was a bit predictable. Except for that Nerougian solider going rouge...that was unexpected. I have to say the Mythronian's were portrayed quite well in this those, perhaps a bit klutzy. My BIGGEST problem though is female Mythronian warriors. I'm not prejudice or anything...but in those times women were not seen as men's equal. If I remember correctly most girls were not even educated. So becoming a warrior in Mythron would be quite impossible. Anyways, nice work!
I was specifically trying to go against what you say is your biggest problem. :P I didn't consider the historical part of it, I just noticed that my Mocs and stories don't include that many women, and I wanted to change that... Anyways, you are right, the story is pretty predictable. :P I'll have to work on that.
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  June 21, 2014
You keep getting better and better! The walls were very good, (if a little too much grey) the landscape was about average, (I would have enjoyed seeing some plants on it) and the inner area of the castle was quite good! As far as the story goes, it was a bit predictable. Except for that Nerougian solider going rouge...that was unexpected. I have to say the Mythronian's were portrayed quite well in this those, perhaps a bit klutzy. My BIGGEST problem though is female Mythronian warriors. I'm not prejudice or anything...but in those times women were not seen as men's equal. If I remember correctly most girls were not even educated. So becoming a warrior in Mythron would be quite impossible. Anyways, nice work!
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  June 21, 2014
Wow, the walls are made ​​very impressive.
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  June 21, 2014
Quoting Joe McGill Nice wall technique! I don't think I've ever seen a castle wall done like that before. However, I'm not a fan of the colour scheme. You should probably make it either lots of bley with a bit of dark or vice versa. Having it all equally those two colours is a little chaotic. In terms of the story, I love the Mythron hatred and the traitorous Nerogueian! Take that guy as an example, my fellow Nerogueians, that's what we should all be doing! In summary, nice, unique build and brilliant story!
Thanks! I agree, I wish I could have done lots of light bley and a little dark bley or vice versa, but I just don't have enough 1x2 and 1x1 plates and tiles of either color to do so, sadly.
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  June 21, 2014
Nice wall technique! I don't think I've ever seen a castle wall done like that before. However, I'm not a fan of the colour scheme. You should probably make it either lots of bley with a bit of dark or vice versa. Having it all equally those two colours is a little chaotic. In terms of the story, I love the Mythron hatred and the traitorous Nerogueian! Take that guy as an example, my fellow Nerogueians, that's what we should all be doing! In summary, nice, unique build and brilliant story!
 
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