Man: Thank you sir. Fax: No problem have a good day. Man: Okay, but, I heard some people saw a sith apprentice running around. Man leaves.
Shran is now aged from when he was a young knight- Shran Maanan: A sith apprentice? Hmmm, I must take care of this, watch out for driods. Commander Fox, Fax, Hops, and Ben: NO SIR! Wait for us!
Shran: Sorry, I gotta get moving.
Fox: Ok boys, we gotta go help Shran, he's too old for this, suit up! Hops, Fax and Ben: Yes Sir!
Hops: This one's mine! Ben: Like Commander Cody says " A big gun doesn't make a big man" Hops: Whatever. Mystery Voice: Help, HELP!
The troops run out and see T Fett being attacked by a sith apprentice. Fox: T FETT!! MEN OPEN FIRE!!!
All troops unleash full fire.
Fox: Go go go! Secure the area! Apprentice flees. Fox: T Fett, are you okay? T Fett: Yeah, just some broken bones, bruises, and internal bleeding, nothing serious. Ben: Oh okay good, I thought you might be hurt.
Shran: I sense something.
Sith apprentice: Ha I was begining to wonder if I had to shock you with lightning to tell you I was here! Battle Begins.
Shran pushes the sith to the edge of the platform. Shran: Give up! I won't hurt you if you surrender! Sith: NEVER! Sith cuts bars on supporting edge.
Shran: Okay, I better leave! Sith: NOOOOOOOOO! The apprentice plummets to his death.
BACK AT THE OUPOST... Hops: Sir , we can't hold em' off! Fox: Fall back! T Fett, go sound the alarm. Ben: Sir! Fax's hit! Fox: Oh man, wheres Shran?!
Shran: Did somebody call me? Shran finishes off the driods.
Shran: Sorry I was late. The sith was just a diversion. Fox: Well it looks like you were outfoxed!
The custom Coruscant Guards. Old Shran, and the apprentice, please rate and comment. THIS IS MY FIRST COMIC, just to tell you.
Judging- Elite Commander T Fett 89/100
Elite Commander CC-7576 89/100
Elite Commander Fed -/100
I´m giving you a 17 of 20 for size (to little, but it has some details, 18 of 20 for story (interesting, but I think you can do that better, still ok), 26 of 30 for Lightsaber Battle (Thats ok), 18 of 20 for Clones V.S. Droids (average work, but not for your title), 10 of 10 for guest (T Fett is a nice guest, but one advice: try to use the next time a phase 1 Clone). Final points: 89 of 100.
That's the great thing about being made out of plastic. You can survive some pretty long falls. Good work Admiral. Oh, and by the way, the "Hammerhead Class" carrier should be posted this week along with my tank if I can find my camera's charger cord.