General Kenobi- *Alright, Squirrel. You're objective is to capture Grievous... And this time, try not to make a mess! Over*
Elite Commando: Squirrel- *Yes sir, over and out!*
About this creation
Elite Commando:Squirrel- Alright, lets go get that blasted cyborg and get outta here!
Trooper: Sid- Blast it! Sir, over there!
Elite Commando:Squirrel- SBDs. Well, we didn't think this'd be easy, did we?
Plo Koon- Well, then, let's quit wasting our time and get over there!
Trooper: Ben- I'm with you all the way, sir!
Fwooom!
Kdew! Kdew!
Slash! Chop!
Kdew! Kdew!
Trooper: Sid- Haha! This is almost too easy!
Elite Commando: Squirrel- We're not out of this yet...
Kdew! Kdew!
Hack! Slash!
Kdew!
Elite Commando: Squirrel- Durus, put a detenator on that door!
Trooper: Durus- Yes, sir!
Plo Koon- Get back!
BOOM!!
Elite Commando: Squirrel- Alright, men, let's go!
Plo Koon- Grievous! You're under arrest by order of the republic!
Droid Commanders-We surrender!
General Grievous- HAHAHA! So, this is all the republic could afford to send. Pathetic! I will crush you, and the republic!
Kdew! Kdew!
Trooper: Sid- Unh...
Trooper: Ben- ugh...
Trooper: Durus- AAGH!!
Plo Koon- Surrender now, Grievous!
General Grievous- Surrender?? Ha! The republic will crumble under my fo--
General Grievous- What the--??
BAMM!!
Genteral Grievous- I will kill you for that, blasted jedi!
Slash!
General Grievous- HAHAHA!!!
Elite Commando: Squirrel- Get back here, Grievous!
General Grievous- So long, fools!
General Grievous- HAHAHAHAHA!!!
Click!
Fwoosh!
Elite Commando: Squirrel- *General Kenobi, this is Squirrel. Sir, I'm afraid we've lost him. Over.*
General Kenobi- *Blast it! Were's he off to next? Over.*
Elite Commando: Squirrel- *We're not sure. Over.*
General Kenobi- *... Over and out.*
Elite Commando: Squirrel- .... Blast it!
Elite Commander T Fett: 85/100
Elite Commander Fed: 83/100
Elite Commander CC-7576: 83/100
Total: 251/300
Well, I'm out of the tournament. I probably should've payed more attention to the rules, but meh. I guess you learn from your mistakes.
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Elite Commander CC-7576 December 22, 2008 |
Judgeing: 16 of 20 for size (In such a way of making a comic I see a problem, it is big, but it is not everything LEGO, there I see a problem), 18 of 20 for story (maybe it is uncreative (grievous rocket, batlle over), but for sure the way you wrote it makes it difficult to read, look at Fedīs storys and compare his way of writing with yours, youīll see what I mean, this is another thing which makes a problem, if you canīt understand the story in the way you need to understand it), 27 of 30 for Lightsaber battle (the massive power of Grievous isnīt seeable, exept of that you showed Plo much to powerful), 20 of 20 for Clones V.S. Droids (good work), 2 of 10 for guest (at that point Iīm hart, you have only yourelf). Final points: 83 of 100. |
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Lord Patrick Leon December 21, 2008 |
Please check outmy next batman comic when you have time |
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Lord Patrick Leon December 17, 2008 |
Awesome, and please check out my batman comic. |
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December 17, 2008 |
having a guest star means it has to be someone else than your self.~ECTF |
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Elite Officer:Michael Sloper December 15, 2008 |
Can you check out my Commander Serge mini figure. |
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December 15, 2008 |
i posted my entry! Come and check it out! |
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December 14, 2008 |
Squirrel, come check out Trolltag #19! ~ James : D |
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December 14, 2008 |
nice job! i like your troops!! |
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December 14, 2008 |
Nice job.
18/20 for the size
19/20 for Story
25/30 for a Lightsaber duel in the batte
18/20 for Clone Vs Driods
5/10 You must have at least one guest Star
(Just for having none.)
Overall: 85/100! nice job.
~ECTF
P.S. Sorry about the late comment I've been with out power for 2 days! |
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December 13, 2008 |
i realy like the 29th pic forsome reoson |
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December 13, 2008 |
oh oh.....this is very good! This will be a hard round in the tournament! I try to post my entry in the next 2 days. Good luck! |
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December 12, 2008 |
Awesome! Sorry I can't say more now, but it's 11:30PM! I need to go sleepy. ~ James : ) |
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December 12, 2008 |
Good work, nice story line, I like all the customs, but why did Ben have to die?! Anyway, I'm sure you'll do good. |
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December 12, 2008 |
dude this is mad I love the base or whatever it is ,i also like the republic clones (red),the commanda is awesome,i swear nice clone captian cape. Nihilis out |
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