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Redemption Chapter 1 (better) . I went back and redid some of the dialogue, and added an important flashback for Dragonax. Main picture by Connor Hoffman. . Dragonax swung his sword in a wide arc, severing the Matoran’s head from his body. As he did so, Dragonax’ vision went black. In his mind, he saw an all too familiar scene spread before him. Dragonax was standing over a Toa of ice, about to kill him. As Dragonax raised his blade to deliver the final blow, the Toa had yelled “How could you betray the Great Spirit?!” Dragonax had ignored and killed the Toa, and thought nothing of his words. After a while though, he found himself pondering what the Toa had said. Whenever he brought up the subject, other Makuta had simply ignored him. But Dragonax was still haunted by this thought. He couldn’t kill anymore without triggering a flashback. His thoughts were interrupted by another Makuta speaking: “Hey, did the Matoran tell you where the masks are or what?!” “Huh? Oh… yeah. He said they’re in a cave about a mile west of here.” Dragonax said half-heartedly. He sighed deeply and took another glance at the Matoran’s decapitated body as the other Makuta flew away. He continued to meditate on what had happened. This isn’t right. Why am I doing it? What’s the point? Dragonax must have been more absorbed in thoughts than he realized, as he was interrupted again by his ally’s return. “I got the masks,” Said the other Makuta. “Let’s head back to the base.” Dragonax spread his wings and flew after his ally. This has to stop. Thought Dragonax as he glided away. Second wall squared: Sorry if some of the dialogue is out of place, I have to re-format this whenever I import it. So whatever work and spacing I did on my computer goes to heck when I copy it XP


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